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    dots Submission Name: FLOzdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 620
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 444



    Description:
       My son and I like to listen to rap and I encourage him to appreciate the poetic verse and creativity. I wrote this for him listening to Kanye and The Game. My son was practicing basketball & teaching me some moves...Love, Peace, Joy!!! Great Day 2 All!!!


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    dotsFLOzdots
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    Chadz flo Goez
    more awake than
    No Doze
    and "He's" schoolin
    again
    Blue Eyez, Bright Smile
    "Crimson Chin"
    Practice makes perfect
    always in Thought
    Battles still "One"
    Won not bought
    Drop Down
    Smoke Up
    Bring "IT" now

    Lift Up
    Blow Out
    Take a Bow




    Submitted on 2005-03-16 10:42:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I am sorry I am not a fan of rap. But I think I translated this to something I can understand and relate to. If I did it correctly then I enjoyed it. Especially the uniqueness of it. Perhaps I am just not "down wit it".
    | Posted on 2005-03-16 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]


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