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    dots Submission Name: Little Lambsdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
    Total Views: 558
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 526



    Description:
       "You clothed us in beauty as a testimony to you." Psalm ?

    Love, Peace, Joy!!!


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    dotsLittle Lambsdots
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    Of Father
    and of Son
    many gracious thanks
    "4" comforting the lambs
    with Love of the softest
    fleece...
    Run free my children
    through the never-ending
    fields of green grass
    Mother-In-Nature always
    provides loving play and un-sought
    Comfort
    their Son shelters
    the forest
    As saplings
    seek the
    Vision of
    Sky
    A Smile
    Appreciating
    blessing sent
    from
    Above




    Submitted on 2005-03-16 10:46:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This prose is beauifully written and easy to follow with its descriptive symbolism. The format also contributes to the smooth deliverence. Adoration radiates from these carefully choosen words. Just for the heck of it try this... Mother-In-Nature always
    provides loving play and un-sought
    comfort
    Their Son shelters
    the forest

    Great prose.
    | Posted on 2005-03-22 00:00:00 | by ladyngold | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm not dure how to comment on something as beautiful as this. This to me as I'm sure to you, has such a meaning. And you did it so well, with the breaks in between giving you time to soak up all the information being given. I have to say I enjoy a good write with an even more beautiful meaning.
    You did this beautifuly and I'm glad I came across this to read today
    Thanks
    Denise
    | Posted on 2005-03-16 00:00:00 | by Forgiven | [ Reply to This ]


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