Description: i've never actually cut myself...but if i cut myself as many times i've thought about it...i would prolly be dead right now...well this poem is a true story...but now the guy is gone...he got hit by a car...and he died...so now he can no longer hurt me or any other person he was hurting...and this is just a story of what i felt like doing when he was around.
cutting is my relief -------------------------------------------
After I lock the door
I sit on the bathroom floor
With my knife in hand
The radio playing my fav. band
I place the blade into my wrist
To stop from crying i bite my fist
Blood starts to run from my skin
Cutting is my favorite sin
My blood stains the carpet
I hope no can notice it
I aply pressure to stop the bleeding
If only he would stop the beating
The scars on my body from him
Show uplike tattoos on my skin
One pain lessens another
The cuts they smother
The scars you leave on my mind
Are invisible inside
Where no one else can see
The only one who notices is me
I'm afraid to runaway
Because you'll catch me someday
And cause me greater pain
That like my blood will stain
But it will stain my heart
I should've noticed from the start
That all you do is cause me grief
And cutting is my relief
well, cutting is my relief. and so are other things. but on cutting and on your poem. its great. it doesn't matter what you do or how you do it to escape. your escape is your mind. be gratefull. mine is cutting and tattoo's. at least your's isn't permenant. and any way you get your fealings out and touch another soul is what life is all about. and today you have touched me. thank you. hardy.
you really portrayed a cutter in this poem, and you dont cut! the detail and description were great but i think that more could be added... but my favorite part was "cutting is my favorite sin" that is one of the best lines in a poem ive heard! i also love "all you do is cause me grief, and cutting is my relief." that really speaks to readers that are cutters! very inspiring! you really dont cut????? keep it up!!
I really like this poem, there is only one part that i personaly didn't like, but the rest was great...
"I aply pressure to stop the bleeding If only he would stop the beating The scars on my body from him Show uplike tattoos on my skin"
i haven't really met a cutter yet who wants to stop bleeding... when i cut i used to do it just to see the blood come out....but then again i didn't cut really deep, just enough to get some blood...the other thing is if he was beating you why would you cut?... i just don't understand that...
overall it's really good though, feel free to PM me, i am intreaged about this poem... and would love to get where you are coming from and do a reread on it :-D
Hey, nicely done- but if that jerk bothered u, u should have said something about it. Well, very nicely done- especially the way u portrayed ur emotions-its as if you have cut ur self b4.. u also set the scene well. I could imagine u sitting on the floor against the door, music on, w/ a knife in ur hand altho- I seriously discorage u 4rm even starting. I don't cut- but it kills me just 2 have friends that do! I have already gotten 2 to stop. u never know what is gunna happen in the future-so why end life on earth now? Well, n-e ways, good poem., expand on the ending tho -Aprie Chick
I like the flow you have going with this poem, it is very morbid and enjoyable... You have a bit of grammatical errors but they can be fixed...the whole way you wrote this goes together VERY well...and by the way thank you for the comment on my "News @ 10" poem.
i dont have much else to say other than what has alreay been said. this is a good poem and i can relate to it very well since i am a cutter. i am glad that this guy is gone form ur life...but it is sad that he was hit by a car... i think.
I agree with delerith for someone who doesnt cut themselves, you've done a great job. I cut some advice don't start it gets you no where in life.now back to the poem it was full emtion i like that i don't see a thing wrong with this poem.don't change anything. hope to hear from you.
Submission Name: cutting is my relief
