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My Domain


Author: diabolicmaggot
ASL Info:    16/f/The depths of hell
Elite Ratio:    2.5 - 15 /26 /11
Words: 79
Class/Type: Poetry /Dark
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My Domain



This is my domain
Filthy, obscene, and insane
Full of angry vigor
The feared realm of angor
Dreadful and immoral
Everyday there is a new quarrel
This is the place people abhor
A place for war
This is where catastrophe's begin and end
Where the maniac beside you will be your next friend
Fiends, demons, devils, and maniacs come here to play
The people are always at dismay
So this is my domain
This is where I'll remain




Submitted on 2005-03-16 16:51:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  dido to boo boo, your poems dont come across very clear. Maybe you should try to make your next poem through someone elses perspective. Thats what helps me to get my point across better.

~LeAnna~
| Posted on 2005-03-17 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]
  this piece is better than the other one you posted. The only thing it seems unfinshed is it.hope to here from you.keep writing.
| Posted on 2005-03-16 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]
  sounds sort of on the schizo side but other than that it is really great hope to read more of your poems what was your inspiratin? was it hate for the world or for the people in it?
| Posted on 2005-03-16 00:00:00 | by boo boo | [ Reply to This ]


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