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    dots Submission Name: Random Tortilladots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
    Total Views: 763
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 512



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       Intergalactic Planetary...Beastie Boys

    Love, Peace, Joy!!! Epiphany ; > } Soul Seez, Mind Breez, Beat BeZ//

    White wine sip of Life
    See the Son
    All IZ PROUD
    FeEl Me....

    Love, Peace, Joy!!!


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    dotsRandom Tortilladots
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    Like playdough in my hands
    the tortilla dough...
    shape of Butterfly
    and of Smurf...
    Hot in my mouth
    the flavor goes...
    "7 Nation Army" plays
    ride the surf...
    Now "IT'S" "General Public"
    that's "Tenderness"
    Sentence not Conviction
    according to "HE"
    I smile across lands
    that's how "HE" bless
    Cosmic is relative SEE
    U R Me I Am HE...




    Submitted on 2005-03-16 21:24:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Tortilla dough is like playdough...but it wont save you money on car insurance...hee-hee. I liked the last two lines of this poem...very, very true. Good job ma dear...
    | Posted on 2005-03-17 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm not sure I understand this. The tempo is so fast it's almost infecting (good thing). The punctuation I think is what threw me, but when I read it aloud it sounded much better.

    This is only the second piece I've read and I look forward to reading more of yours.

    Zen
    | Posted on 2005-03-16 00:00:00 | by Chaney | [ Reply to This ]


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