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    Author: omnipotent
    ASL Info:    17/F/Wisconsin
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 82/63/23
    Words: 226
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       This was written by an ex-boyfriend of mine that cheated on me. A few months after we broke up we started talking again, and he wrote this for me. I just wanted to know what your interpretation of it was so maybe I can see something that I didn't when I read it. XOXO


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    I'm lost in a whirlwind of emotion,
    All from one lie.
    One lie, two people, four eyes.
    The cause of countless tears
    Amounted from fear that my heart would tear.
    All for what? I'll explain.
    My picture had no frame or base of relationship.
    That's where you came in.
    I finally gave in to destiny to be alone.
    Although before that would happen I was trapped in a predicament.
    Your name in my brain,
    Your lips on my lips.
    Still it wasn't enough for you the truth and nothing but.
    Bu the truth was just cause enough for me to hide.
    Hide form my past, look for my present, and plan for the future.
    How can what happened last week mature to freeze heat?
    I'm not too sure.
    Then again loves not positive to happen.
    I'm positive I've never loved and lost,
    I don't see you has gone only missed.
    To get you back I'd pay the cost,
    Name your ransom.
    Without your beauty I'm ugly not handsome.
    I f*cked up them lucked up getting you back.
    Now I'm stuck stumped hanging from where I jumped.
    Cut me some slack.
    There I said it,
    My past keeps coming back like a memory relapsed.
    I tried to collapsed my idealistic belief of dreams,
    Yet I made my bed and now I have to sleep.




    Submitted on 2005-03-17 09:58:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That sounds like most of the relationships I've heard about from my friends recently and a few I've been in. Its hard to "miss" someone and you captured that fully in this poem. Great job.
    | Posted on 2005-04-28 00:00:00 | by j4wolfe | [ Reply to This ]


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