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Author: manda_bear
ASL Info:    24;f; alabama
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This is about my brothers ex-girlfriend who passed away over the weekend. My brother isn't taking it so well. That's why I pray for him to stop so the same thing won't happen to him. He's got to much to live for. Including the fact that he could get straight and be able to pay his bills. May God bless him with that strength. Amen.


The addictions to strong to overcome
She could have stopped but she didn't know how
All the drugs made her think that this was how it should always be for her
The one drug couldn't quit calling her name
It scramed for her it said "I am Meth. I am a high that you will always want and need."
She couldn't say no so she took one shot and she went to sleep
She never woke again.
He don't know how to deal with it so he goes and does the same things
I pray that he stops and I pray that he realizes how much he's hurting himself and his family
Lord please help my brother get over the pain that has been put into his heart
Lord help him see that he is better than that
Help him Lord to be able to stop taking the drugs
My prayers may help him but I'm not sure if he want's it or not
If I could I would take the drugs from him and burn them so that he could see how much it hurts me

Submitted on 2005-03-17 10:28:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i will keep your brother in my prayers. it's been awhile since you wrote this poem. how is he doing? i never did succumb to meth but had an addiction to crack that nearly killed me. addiction is insidious and wicked and i hope that he can find his way clean.
| Posted on 2005-04-09 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
  Oh my gosh, I am so sorry. I wish the best for your brother, i like how you say you want him to stop, it really shows how much you love and care about him. Its almost like you put yourself in the places of others to give a better perspective.
You should check out some of my writing, although you seem so much into happiness i wouldnt want to drown you with my own thoughts. :)

| Posted on 2005-03-22 00:00:00 | by necrotic | [ Reply to This ]
  I am so sorry to hear about the lost of your brother g/f and to hear about how addicted your brother is as well, This might be the wake up call or him falling deeper into it.

This is the time to give this poem, on the one moent of time ,his head might be clear. Then get in his face and drive him crazy until he gets help.

This poem/ real life story will touch and help others who may be doing it or thinking about trying meth,because thier friends say it kool.

I have never seen drugs or drinking help anyone family.

You should be so proud of yourself for writing it and posting it.

Ty for bring real life into a realm that sometimes gets lost in fiction.
| Posted on 2005-03-18 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
  a very heart felt write...unfortunately meth is overtaking coke around the u.s., especiallt in your area...
here is the national # to narcotics anonymous:
(818)773-9999 and the email address is:
i unfortunately know alot about drugs and alcohol and the only way your brother will quit is for himself and not anyone else...
he's still young and has a good chance to turn his life around...
i wrote "release the hounds", it's about the turmoil of addiction...

| Posted on 2005-03-17 00:00:00 | by pestiferous | [ Reply to This ]
  I agree with Deacon, what you said here is deeper than a thousand of other poems, because it is very authentic and truthful in nature. What you are saying here should be shown to your brother, I mean probably not now, because he is might not take it to well yet, but dude, get some help for him.
Very much well written, except for a few typos, look over it again to correct some of the small mistakes. Keep writing reality,
J.C. Prescott
| Posted on 2005-03-17 00:00:00 | by jcpdandalice | [ Reply to This ]
  How do you comment on a poem that means so much? It has great meanig to you and should be read by your brother, perhaps it will flick a switch of realization and he might better understand just how much his drug use is hurting you. Keep writing from the heart for that is where true talent is found.
| Posted on 2005-03-17 00:00:00 | by Deacon | [ Reply to This ]

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