The Pure Hearted -------------------------------------------
She laughs and smiles
Converses with others
And spreads her joy.
Like the sun
Sweeping across a dark land
She lights up the lives of all
Who choose to open their eyes and ears.
If trouble comes her way
She seeks to ameliorate things.
Perhaps she lets out a sigh
But not for long
And within moments all is well.
Like a pull toy
She always says the right thing
Never complains
And is always there to love.
As a human
She displays compassion and forgiveness.
Hatred is a word unfamiliar to her tongue
And unknown to her heart.
She does things on a whim
Her spontanaety a comfort
In a world with so many conventions.
She's the type who'd run into the rain
Engage in child's play
Jump in a puddle
Just for the heck of it
To make the best of a moment.
Be kind to such a precious gem
The pure hearted are all too easy to corrupt.
For a free spirit
Is the best kind of all.
She is beautiful
Simply beautiful.
"Ameliorate" is an SAT word. :-) I think you could work on the flow a bit, but it captured the kind of quote unquote "beautiful soul" that's all too rare in this day and age. Well done.
Hey, though i enjoyed this read i dont think i could really connect with it. something about it didnt let me be close enough to it as i would have liked to been. but maybe thats just me!
i liked the topic a lot but had a problem with the flow of it, just didnt place together for me. but otherwise, it definetly brings out the beauty of this person and makes u wanna be a little more like her...!
Beautiful is the right word.. Too few people like this. It made me feel like trying more to be that person. Very well expressed. And I like learning new words.. thanks for a new one today "ameliorate".
This line is lovely -
"And spreads her joy. Like the sun"
A decent, good person, with a free spirit. A lovely topic to write about.
What in the world does ameliorate mean? I had to get a dictionary to find out that it meant to improve and I believe that it would be just as beautiful if you put improve there. It was absolutely fanstasticly written. I could feel the warmth and love that represented by this work of art.
This poem is one of those that just bring a smile to your face. (:
It was really nice. You see....in poetry.....I don't really look for ryhmes and all....but more towards if the poem can link to what is on my mind at the time or if I can relate to it. I mean.....good wording and ryhming is good....but the meaning behind the poem is so much more.
I try to be optimistic and pure and this poem really made me feel good about it. I love how you made it where the reader can actually picture the girl jumping in a puddle just for the heck of it. The neat thing is....I do that all the time. lol. This sort of reminded me of me. I mean...I'm a guy and I am not near as pure but still.....I can slightly relate to this girl. And yes....the pure at heart is the most easily currupted. I've been corrupted but with God and determination.....I pulled myself out.
Well....this was a good write. I'm sorry I can't give a better review but I'm really tired and sort of out of it. lol
Submission Name: The Pure Hearted
