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    dots Submission Name: Night Visionsdots
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    Author: biwitchin_angel
    ASL Info:    28/ F/ Texas
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 15/12/6
    Words: 281
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 269
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       This one is kinda long but I had a crap load of fun writing it. I hope ya'll enjoy reading it as much as I enjoyed writing it.


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    dotsNight Visionsdots
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    Not all my night visions are the same.
    In this one I'm standing alone, in the rain.
    I need help but there is none around.
    No one in sight, the falling rain is the only sound.
    Then you walk out of the dreary night,
    And wrap your arms around me tight.
    I lay my head on your shoulder, feeling tired.
    You take me me home to a roaring fire.
    Soon I begin to shiver but not from the cold.
    Your hand slides up my arm while our eyes lock and hold.
    The firelight flickers across your face.
    What I see in your eyes causes my heart to race.
    Hands touching, caressing, tugging cloths off.
    Bare skin covered by kisses that are feather soft.
    Feather soft kisses turn to urgent nibbles.
    You sucked and licked from clit to nipples.
    I feasted on your skin from neck to penis.
    The joy I felt was sent by Goddess Venus.
    Laying you on your back, our passions began to sore.
    Climbing up your body, mine wanting more.
    I straddle your hips and slowly sink down.
    You completely fill me and I feel like I'll drown.
    From the pleasure of being joined as one.
    Passion burning hotter then a thousand suns.
    Both of us thrusting to a rhtym older then time.
    We climb to climax, to a release that is sublime.
    Cries of excitment fill the electrified air.
    I collapse on your chest, move, I don't dare.
    Our breathing ragged, our bodies covered in sweat.
    We cuddle, my head on your chest, our desires spent.
    The fire burns low, the room begins to cool.
    As we doze just before dawn, I think, you're one special jewel.




    Submitted on 2005-03-17 15:58:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like the words ( except the too vivid description of your body parts, and I'm no prude) you painted a very good picture of a passionate encounter, but it was a wee bit spoiled by some forced rhyming.
    I feasted on your skin from neck to penis.
    The joy I felt was sent by Goddess Venus
    Please! You could have still conveyed everything you wanted without rhyming at all.
    The fire burns low, the room begins to cool.
    As we doze just before dawn, I think, you're one special jewel
    Sorry, bad way to end it. It's good enough to re-write. Be happy, Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-03-17 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      O_O

    Damn! This started off as a total cliché and ended as a porno flick. Don't know what to say...
    ... pretty lame but provided some interesting visuals :D
    | Posted on 2005-03-17 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      um u killed it with the clit and nipple thing...this isnt what poets mean when they say pu imagery in ur poems lol the beginning was good-ryhme realllllly forced-u dont have to rhyme everything and sometimes ite better if u dont. the whole sex scene isnt original at all anyone could write those words who have had the enxperience it isnt anything new.
    | Posted on 2005-03-17 00:00:00 | by brokensmile | [ Reply to This ]



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