I've been thinking about this senryu since yesterday. and I'm still undecided, but figured I'd better say something before I forget everything. ;)
I cannot decide about 'consumed rationale'. Does the rationale consume you? like 'overwhelming thought'? or did you consume this rationale, internalizing this love as your reason for life? like 'reasoning devoured'?
This is a lovely write, even if I didnt understand your first line. and its really not so full of mushyness... more like affection than mush. ;)
this is indeed lovely. consuming rationale is what love is all about-who needs to be rational when love is around! breadfruit of my life-that is absolutely so original and says so much. excellent haiku Ben!
ok first, nothing made me happier today than reading a haiku. something about that just makes me so happy. Also, i LOVE your icon. that also made me happy as hell. alright... so: the poem:
I could definitly sense feeling behind it and you managed to make it mean something. Most short poems manage to communitcate absolutely nothing and i pretty much just end up wasting part of my day reading it. Sad as it is, I'll never get those 30 seconds back... anyway, with this, it was actually very good and contrary to the usual. It was cool because usually i'm a tard and can't figure things out, but it definitly made sense. good work.