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    dots Submission Name: BL4<|{ R41Ndots
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    Author: Lil_Santo
    ASL Info:    19=I
    Elite Ratio:    3.31 - 34/52/15
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Serious
    Total Views: 389
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1015



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       3 dead.....anybody elseż


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    dotsBL4<|{ R41Ndots
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    Let the rain fall black
    on top your white cadillac
    and let ninjas jump from trees & slice your nut sac
    you're so stale you make me vomit
    your repetitious sonnet
    gets me so angry that I'm about to bomb it
    like a kamakazi I don't care about self
    I'm not afraid to die, and not afraid to lose my wealth
    am I clear?
    there's only one life to live here
    then you become forgotten when you disappear
    but it's okay, a real Saint never dies anyway
    we're part of the immortal and don't care what people say
    others who're like you are just a stain
    abroad you're all plain
    keeping styles with others just to maintain
    a simple fact of life that's called fitting in
    sheep being hurded while the industries win
    I told you all before, I'm looking out for you
    but I guess you won't listen, now go on living like clones do..........




    Submitted on 2005-03-17 16:27:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This message was just one of the best.

    I agree that many change up their style of writing to please everyone else...I think like you do...i write what i write how i like and if others dont like it that's fine i'm not trying to please everyone...just myself.

    "like a kamakazi I don't care about self
    I'm not afraid to die, and not afraid to lose my wealth"

    you got some lyrical talents there papi.
    | Posted on 2005-03-18 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a decent writing I like the message that you give with this. You talk about being your own person and not to be molded by anybody else..Good, I'll keep that in mind the next time I'm watching a Reality Show.
    JD
    HECKLE
    | Posted on 2005-03-17 00:00:00 | by JD_Heckle | [ Reply to This ]


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