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Hey VATO!!!!

Author: Lil_Santo
ASL Info:    19=I
Elite Ratio:    3.31 - 34 /52 /15
Words: 130
Class/Type: Joke /Comedy
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te voy a cortar tu cabesa!

Hey VATO!!!!

Who's the dimmest darkest star
Lil Santo wins by far
Who's the only one to hit it
Santo is just to get wit it
I'm the angel stab and strangle
above the clouds your body dangle
drop you on a patch of land
hitting rock beneath the sand
psycho stealth a ninja creeping
stab in the face while sleeping
I'm the last thought you knew
half awake before I slew
God takes no pity on a demon
fuck your kids I'll leave them screaming
you jumped into your richie bed
sliced you in your richie head
laughing while a richie bled
just another richie dead
I'm the Earthly realm defender
make your life return to sender
never should have had it so
God gave you this Lil Santo........

Submitted on 2005-03-17 17:18:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  comedy and dark. very nice. to me it seemed very other line was in a different tone then the others. liked it. pictures in my head from this was just helarious. lovely really.

| Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by poeticblindness | [ Reply to This ]
  It's ever twisted little thing I have every wanted to do.
"You jumped into your richie bed,
Sliced you in your richie head."
Nice commentary on the overtly rich.
| Posted on 2005-03-28 00:00:00 | by Enslaved Shonen | [ Reply to This ]
  u ever heard brandons freestyle (he plays around in CKY..or used to i guess) it reminds me of it for somereason. Great poem though, some of the grammer could use a touch up but i love how your killing people but it makes me laugh. Great write
| Posted on 2005-03-27 00:00:00 | by Jane Lost | [ Reply to This ]
  This sounds very...Oh I don't know... Insane Clown Posse-ish. Kind of a "Three little piggies" meets "the Boogie Man" I liked it. I actually read it out loud a few times, and the more I read it the more it confirmed my theory. Only you can confirm it or deny it but that's what I got out of it. Good job.
| Posted on 2005-03-21 00:00:00 | by Lightbringer | [ Reply to This ]
  hmm lil santo huh? lil diablo seems more fittin ;)

I will agree with JR in saying you had very clever rhymes. I'm off to read more of your posts...
| Posted on 2005-03-18 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
  Sounds Like a [censored]in' Juggalo on the loose. I like your style Santo. Clever rhymes... I especially liked ; "psycho stealth a ninja creeping stab in the face while sleeping I'm the last thought you knew half awake before I slew" Great job.
| Posted on 2005-03-17 00:00:00 | by JR Hoodlum | [ Reply to This ]

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