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    dots Submission Name: Consolation In Feardots
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    Author: grigori
    ASL Info:    23/M/St. Lucia
    Elite Ratio:    4.3 - 77/68/18
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 661
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       not too sure what was going on here...but i lost a close freind and my fearlessness has made me numb...


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    dotsConsolation In Feardots
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    Finding love in each shiver,
    Gives me faith in embrace,
    Nothing's ever been discovered,
    That gives such power,
    Erotic beyond,

    If ever there was a feeling envied,
    A numbness makes you conquer,
    Such this feeling,
    Such this tug,

    Even in the darkest corner,
    It only grows,
    Still you run,
    Then you think that it surrenders,
    It sits you down,
    And explains how it Won...

    Kdmar




    Submitted on 2005-03-18 01:23:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It's sometimes difficult to relay the emotion of loss. Manifest that loss into life - your words are of only temporary sorrow for nothing is ever truly lost. Love, Peace, Joy!
    | Posted on 2005-03-23 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      First and foremost, I am sorry to hear about your friend. My deepest simpathies to you. But this poem is nothing short of great. It took me two times to get what it was, it was your heart. Feelings dont always make sence at first. Your anger, hurt, and love for your friend has come out here. I think that you harnessed that emotion to write a really good poem. Good job.
    | Posted on 2005-03-18 00:00:00 | by poeticvisionary | [ Reply to This ]


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