A different Journey
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I wrote this for Al-Anon so that my dad could see how I feel. The title needs help. Tell me what you think.
A different Journey
No measure of wits, Or sly, cool remarks Could bind the journey On which I’ll embark. No one will change my mind to go. I go wherever the wind will blow. You can say all you want, but falter, I’ll not. Sleep in a tent, on the ground or a cot. A woodsmen, seafarer, Jack of all trades. I’ve been ‘round the world And back again. The journey, today, I’m going to take Is to my own Father’s wake. And brave I will be, Courageous…, but… I have to say something. I just don’t know what. How can I celebrate The death of a man Who in my weakest hour, held my hand? I’m brave enough to stare death in the eye. But I’m not brave enough to say goodbye. |
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Hmm the title of this could be a bit more discriptive of the core of your feeling. The confusion of your tone also brings a bit of confusion to your reader. Your work should be able to stand alone without a discription, since in publishing you would not have one. I had to go back to read yours. ( I rarely read the descriptions first).| | Posted on 2005-03-18 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ] | this was a great poem. you could feel the confusion in your words. youve been through so much and yet, this is the hardest thing youve ever had to go though. good luck on your journey. and i think the title is fine. good job. | Holy o.O | Posted on 2005-03-18 00:00:00 | by Holy Wood | [ Reply to This ] | This is beautiful. You put it together so well too. I get from this that sometimes the shortest journey is the hardest one. You've been around the world but the trip you're about to take, though it may be just down the road.. is the hardest of all. Saying goodbye is never easy. A good poem. | ~Sandra | Posted on 2005-03-18 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ] | |
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