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    dots Submission Name: The Secret on the Third Enddots
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    Author: HurtDeepDown
    ASL Info:    24/F/OHIO
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 165/161/42
    Words: 292
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Description:
       Just something I wrote about a month ago cause I kind told my friend that she was annoying the shit out of me and it really pissed her off so she tried to find ways to make my boyfriend break up with me. all i can say is...what a bitch!


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    dotsThe Secret on the Third Enddots
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    God, why am I in this place?
    Why do I have 3 more hours to find my answers?
    cause tonight the 3-way phone call is stopping by,
    and I'm not ready to pick up...
    I'm never ready.

    I don't have the courage to lift it up and press talk,
    what if no words flow through this mouth of mine?
    I'll just be the secret on the 3rd end,
    the 3rd wheel.

    I've done nothing but sit here for the past 2 hours,
    wondering when I'll hear another ring,
    and then hesitating,
    afraid it might come,
    seeking for answers,
    that lie behind the truth.

    I didn't mean to hand her the message,
    that hid many of the truths I had kept from her as time went on.
    I was exploding in this small bubble,
    but before I do, I wanna stop breathing.

    I'll hold my breathe and count to ten,
    and by the time I think,
    my mind will go blurry,
    and my world will go black,
    and the stars will shine throught these fragile eyelids,
    and are held so tightly shut.

    But it's only what I'm thinking,
    as I lift my arms and want to dig my nails in,
    or slam my head right into this desk that sits in front of me.

    I wanna scream so loud,
    and wake everyone up,
    maybe the world will scream with me,
    so I won't feel so alone.

    Someone please let the phone keep ringing,
    so when the last ring comes I'll allready be gone,
    let it ring until there is no life,
    in the tiny body of mine,
    for I was never there to begin with,
    cause my sight brings no joy,
    and my voice is empty.




    Submitted on 2005-03-18 15:30:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It sounds like you need a hug...But don't ask me*shudders*.I really like the emotion displayed in this.It showed maturity in a young adult.Don't you hate the fact that realtiy is so painful?Love the imagery, relly good write
    cami
    | Posted on 2005-03-24 00:00:00 | by camoflage | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't get it? Noticably though, I'm no longer geting what other people are writing. I mean what your expressed made sense, but the sentence just didn't do it for me. I don't know maybe I don't speak english proper anymore.
    | Posted on 2005-03-18 00:00:00 | by Das_Ein_Sinender | [ Reply to This ]
      wow! if these are feelings from deep inside of you they send a huge cry for help! you want other people to notice you and to acknowledge your presence but that doesnt always happen!
    good write, great vocab!
    xoxoxomuchlove-ash
    | Posted on 2005-03-18 00:00:00 | by DanceADream | [ Reply to This ]


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