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Your Lickable Friend

Author: Lil_Santo
ASL Info:    19=I
Elite Ratio:    3.31 - 34 /52 /15
Words: 127
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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a little poem of Epic Proportions

Your Lickable Friend

I can
slap it up against a wall
of a sky scraper until it starts to fall
I can
use it as a surf board
or put a handle on it and use it as a fat sword
It's big enough to replace the hoover dam
if I'm running real fast it hits you like a semi BLAM!
no that's not the neighbors manatee
cause when I'm swimming it's the cow of the Sea
I could pole vault with it but that shit would hurt
I search for underground rivers fucking the dirt
I sit on a ship and tell girls to walk the plank
it's what I use to pogo on a skank
it's so big that time and space can't transcend
my lickable friend....

Submitted on 2005-03-18 16:18:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  *lol* ....That shouldnt have been a turn on for me ...So lets pretend it wasnt ..mmkay?
I praise you for being able to write that long about your ....friend....*ahem*
Funnily enough it was also just a really good written peice ...Which i had to check out ...because you made me ...
umm ...You're disturbing ...And Stuff...
| Posted on 2005-03-30 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
  wooooow. i'm sorry, i thought this was hilarious.

"I could pole vault with it but that [censored] would hurt"

that is too funny! how did you come up with that cuz it's just so loco...
| Posted on 2005-03-19 00:00:00 | by Phoenix2004 | [ Reply to This ]
  You know, tonight I guess I went on a "date", or maybe I was just hanging out. But whatever it was.. I ruined it. Completely. I don't know how this actually makes me think, but it made me find nothing wrong with your writing. I'm in a terrible mood, but your piece made me have a slight mood change. Thanks. made me laugh.
| Posted on 2005-03-18 00:00:00 | by Das_Ein_Sinender | [ Reply to This ]
  LMFAO well this was quite the entertainment for me today...there is nothing i would change

my fav line is "I search for underground rivers fking the dirt." that was just too good.
| Posted on 2005-03-18 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]

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