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    dots Submission Name: 21 Questionsdots
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    Author: PookiezBookie
    ASL Info:    16/f/az
    Elite Ratio:    4.4 - 103/129/49
    Words: 279
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       This was written to me by my one love anthony. He gave this to me a couple of months ago. I hope you like it as much as i did. enjoy.


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    what would you do if I asked you again for the second time?
    would you push away and just be friends or would you be mine?
    what would you do if I tried to kiss you on your sexy lips?
    would you go with the flow or would my kiss miss?
    if you said yes would distance be a problem the second time around?
    could you handle the pressure and if you can, can you tell me now?
    can you tell me how much you love me, would you let me know?
    do you believe I love you so much, i'd never let you go?
    do you believe that we're meant to be together forever?
    do you believe if we got married that i'd cherrish you forever?
    do you ever wish you could go back in time and change the past?
    do you ever wonder how long the pain will last?
    do you ever wish one of your dreams would become a reality?
    is it about that one you love, that beautiful face you love to see?
    do you see yourself in my arms holding you gently baby?
    is this a sign of God telling me that in the future you'll be my lady?
    tell me God, is the answer yes or no?
    if the answers yes, will you or love show me the road?
    will loving this person too much lead to a broken heart?
    is it wrong to be in love even though two people are apart?
    is time an enemy or is the enemy time?
    I have 21 questions, all I need now is 21 answers, if you have any of the answers please reply




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      Pretty good, I ask the same questions sometimes, I never do get answers, and one's that get answered are always lies or seem to be. any way, I liked this and the way it was written, how you ask if time is the enemy and if two can love if they're apart. I believe two apart can be in love and that not only is the purest thing in life but at the same is the most evil and hurtfull thing .
    Good write I'm gonna read your other one now.
    | Posted on 2005-03-27 00:00:00 | by jermwerm | [ Reply to This ]
      When I read through this poem, I was filled with a sense of warmth and innocence. The writer's use of words are clear, concise, and hit the very core of the raw emotion and unbridled joy one feels when they are truly in love with someone. Its flawless in my opinion and could not have been written better by anyone except Anthony himself. Which is basically my point. The personal overtones and comment given with the submission make this poem a very personal and intended message for Miss Pookiez. That is what makes it so easily understood and deeply felt. You can tell Anthony he is very lucky to be so flawlessly in love with someone and it shows clearly through his words. 5+++
    As far as the technical stuff...it probably needs alot of revision. But, who cares?! Anthony and I don't!
    | Posted on 2005-03-19 00:00:00 | by Xsiv | [ Reply to This ]
      Well these questions shows that anthony actually cares about you. Well some parts where alittle to choppy.. I was struggeling on some of them.. Those are all good questions though.. I mean I feel like maybe I should take those questions and think about them about myself. You see I really like this one guy, I finally opened to him after he dumped his girlfriend. Which I am not sure if that was best. Cause in reply he said he is cool with me liking him.. But he wants to stay single for a while.. Which got me so mad.. But I have all these dreams about him.. I am jsut wondering if they will come true.. Cause all I ever want to do is just kiss him on the lips. And no that he is mine,..
    Sorry about all my blah.. The questions were really cute from anthony... I wish the guy I like would write something like this for me.. But again a little choppy..

    stephanie
    | Posted on 2005-03-19 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
      Sorry but I like'in it to reading a book about stop signs. Too choppy. these comments are not meant to touch on the emotion of the poem for that is all yours, but to quote a bad comment no-no "it has no flow ". Is this poem meant to be reworded, no, this is a poem between you and anthony and thats where it's great.
    | Posted on 2005-03-19 00:00:00 | by Deacon | [ Reply to This ]
      i dont know exactly what you want for a response here. i think its incredibly obvious that anthony loves you very much, however this poem fits together about as well as a jigsaw puzzle where all the pieces are round. its incredibly choppy and worded in awkward and clichéd ways - "do you believe I love you so much, i'd never let you go?" and the like. you clearly love this poem, because of what it means, and not how it works together. i think that as an example of anthony's love for you this is a really sweet poem, but if you want it to be as good as it has the potential to be, it needs to be seriously reworded and reworked
    | Posted on 2005-03-19 00:00:00 | by jinx | [ Reply to This ]
      I think that anthony cares a lot about you and that care comes through loud and clear. I hope it works out well...I can only answer #19 - yes, loving anyone too much will lead to a broken heart, but that's not to say that it can't then be mended, nor is it to say that it's not worth it. Anyway, there's some pain in everything worthwhile...how else can we be sure we're alive?
    | Posted on 2005-03-19 00:00:00 | by deadndreaming | [ Reply to This ]


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