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Devils and Angels


Author: Deacon
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Words: 107
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Words in caps read loudly
lower cases softly
hope you like it.


Devils and Angels



AAAAHHHH!
OPEN EYES!
SLAPPED EARS!
THRU WORDS!
DROP TEARS!
I REAM EVERY SOUL WITH BROKEN DREAMS!
SCREAM! sssshhhh....
PAIN! sssshhhh....
HATE! sssshhhh....
closed eyes......
covered ears....
thru silence breaks fear.....
lay to rest your fiery rage.....
for i bring upon you a calming gaze.....
AAAAHHHH!
FISTS RAISED!
CLOUDS BREAK REVEALING MY RAGE!
calm my child....
open yourself up....
DON'T TOUCH ME!
I AM BUT A BASTARD CAUGHT IN YOUR TRAPPINGS!
LIKE A WOLF IN SHEEPS WRAPPINGS!
a wolf tail can be tucked....
close your eyes to all this fuss.....
for rage and hate can not break this union we made....
SHE WINS AGIAN!.....my whispering maid.....




Submitted on 2005-03-19 08:20:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Yet another awesome write. I myself am stuck, I have serious writer's block.

I only wish I could write like you. Myabe you could give me some advice on some of my works? I would love to hear some of your thoughts on my work.

If you don't have time, that's okay.

Keep up the great work!

Unicorn
| Posted on 2005-04-14 00:00:00 | by Unicorn Poet | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked how you put in the caps and lowercase it added to the battle you write about. I guess just the title initself drew me in to read it (b/c my pin is Devils Angel) but when i started to read i couldn't stop soemthing about it just kept me going wanting to reach the bottom of the page. I got out of it that it was a battle within yourself betwwen good and bad and right and wrong. I loved the transition you used two extreams but you didn't over do it. Awesome work. It made me frustrated b/c i felt like i was the one going through the battle like it was real and not something i just came across and read. Keep it up!
hannah
| Posted on 2005-03-19 00:00:00 | by Devils Angel | [ Reply to This ]
  This was all in all, a bit confusing. Honestly I didn't like it all that much, but I liked the idea. The power play that you made was rather thought provoking and it makes you wonder if this is a struggle between the internal angels and demons of a human mind or of the beings fighting in their literal form. It was interesting to see how it comes out, but I feel like their isnt a very strong ending to this..."Thru", should also be changed to "through".
You know how to write, keep it up,
J.C. Prescott
| Posted on 2005-03-19 00:00:00 | by jcpdandalice | [ Reply to This ]


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