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    dots Submission Name: The Story Is Overdots
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    Author: juss_kriss
    ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 404/445/126
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1075
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    Description:
       this is the final part of my series. unless you have read the ones before this one, you might not be able to understand it.


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    dotsThe Story Is Overdots
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    avoiding mom
    avoiding dad
    barley talking to them
    avoiding "the talk"
    about what happened
    and the feelings she feels
    slowly healing on her own
    without anyones help
    figuring out what to do
    forced to talk
    forced to tell
    feeling pressured
    to do what her dad thinks is right
    she feels overproteced
    and for the first time in her life
    she pulls away from her dad
    hurting him because she was anry
    slammed doors
    pounding footsteps
    slowly fading
    left alone
    anger draining
    trying to reason
    bonding again
    fixed relationships
    decision made
    and for the time being
    the story is over




    Submitted on 2005-03-19 14:46:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like this because this says what my life was like for the past six months. I especially like how you say :for the time being..the story is over: because as anyone who has been through something hard knows...its really never over.
    | Posted on 2005-05-06 00:00:00 | by Joybell | [ Reply to This ]
      i really liked the emmotion displayed by this poem. i can relate to it , an it captured my attention. it was definitly worth my time.keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2005-03-19 00:00:00 | by brokensmile | [ Reply to This ]


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