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The Story Is Over

Author: juss_kriss
ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 404 /445 /126
Words: 100
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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this is the final part of my series. unless you have read the ones before this one, you might not be able to understand it.

The Story Is Over

avoiding mom
avoiding dad
barley talking to them
avoiding "the talk"
about what happened
and the feelings she feels
slowly healing on her own
without anyones help
figuring out what to do
forced to talk
forced to tell
feeling pressured
to do what her dad thinks is right
she feels overproteced
and for the first time in her life
she pulls away from her dad
hurting him because she was anry
slammed doors
pounding footsteps
slowly fading
left alone
anger draining
trying to reason
bonding again
fixed relationships
decision made
and for the time being
the story is over

Submitted on 2005-03-19 14:46:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like this because this says what my life was like for the past six months. I especially like how you say :for the time being..the story is over: because as anyone who has been through something hard knows...its really never over.
| Posted on 2005-05-06 00:00:00 | by Joybell | [ Reply to This ]
  i really liked the emmotion displayed by this poem. i can relate to it , an it captured my attention. it was definitly worth my time.keep up the good work.
| Posted on 2005-03-19 00:00:00 | by brokensmile | [ Reply to This ]

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