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    dots Submission Name: The June-snowdots
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    Author: _taateli_
    ASL Info:    18/F/Finland
    Elite Ratio:    4.78 - 84/113/29
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Description:
       i just wrote this in a few minutes in a minimum hangover(yes, i do come from finland)and listening to a band called marple frame(though this poem has nothing to do with the music but still check out the band as a tip)and yay no need to tell the poem sucks cos this is just one of those i-need-to-do-something-poems.


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    dotsThe June-snowdots
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    too much noise
    loud beautiful screaming
    no rest
    no peace
    just the noise
    filling the me
    the you
    the everything around
    sending shivers down our
                  spines
    throbbing pain in
                  my head

    the funny taste in my mouth
    a new sensation filling the body
    jump kick scream rage
    but i let out only a whisper
    why?

    it was [the] my tragedy
    with a hint of something blue
    though
    it was glittering
    in the forest
                  today

    would you come
    and dance[?]
    though it's quiet
    such a loud silence
    [but then again
    it was just the june with
                  snow.]




    Submitted on 2005-03-20 08:49:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      oh, to the contrary- oxymorons are my favorite. you paint such vivid pictures with words... i love reading your work- it makes me feel all delicate and fairylike... *md*
    | Posted on 2005-04-03 00:00:00 | by MerryDeath | [ Reply to This ]
      The last finnish poem I read was the Kalevala, but actually I didn't finish it, because it was so long, so perhaps I ought to have said the last unfinnish poem I read. This was was much better (well shorter at least), sort of stark and bleak like Lappland under the midnight sun. To be utterly frank, I didn't understand exactly what you wished to convey. I can well imagine that thecountry you live in is a rich source of poetic inspiration. I went out with a Finnish girl 40 years ago, Anneli Nieminen and she was a rich source of poetic inspiration!
    | Posted on 2005-03-21 00:00:00 | by hanuman | [ Reply to This ]
      Actually your poem is awesome. I liked how its filled with oxymorons. and the emotion in it is true and ginuen. pluse all the oxymorons are true for the most part wich shows us just how screwed up our world really is. I don't have that much to say about it other than you did i great job on it. Keep up the writing!
    Hannah
    | Posted on 2005-03-20 00:00:00 | by Devils Angel | [ Reply to This ]


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