This was a sweet and short poem. I agree with Rain, the flow does seem to be a bit off. Now..for a title, could maybe be..."See Me?" or maybe.. "Hidden Lover" (A little cheesy, but its a suggestion) anyways, this was a good poem. Nice Job
this was something... I'm not sure what I feel about it at times I though it was amazing but at the same time the rhyme thing really took me off the path... I'm not a big fan of rhyming... I think you should extend this and maybe change the formate just a little ... but as an overall this piece was pretty good.
Well, this is true to life. It takes me back to high school and college with that cute guy in English looking at you during some dull lecture about William Blake or whatever. You're willing to pledge your undying love, but you just think he'd rather look at you than some obese middle-aged guy. It is very hard to be nonchalant in situations like that. I enjoyed this.
Why not call it something like A Crush or Crushed?