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    dots Submission Name: A Four-Pair in Hand.dots
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    Author: Torie
    Elite Ratio:    2.69 - 176/194/40
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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       See, suckers, I smashed my own TV.


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    dotsA Four-Pair in Hand.dots
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    With a small axe
    I smashed in the front of my TV.
    Actually, I smashed the screen.

    I was free, completely free.

    And with superb confidence, I bought eight television sets.
    I piled them one on top of the other in two stacks of four.

    I knew I could beat one poem with another poem
    So I thought I could beat one TV with another TV,
    In fact, why not eight.

    I turned them on
    In complete control.
    At first without sound
    And I was just blown away by the pictures.

    I could see the whole world in front of me.
    I despised all of you who only watch one TV at a time.
    You are complete suckers
    While I am in command of eight.

    I have attached two reins to each set
    And I sit in my lounge with a four-pair in hand.

    And we gallop right out the door.

    Torie.




    Submitted on 2004-04-01 01:26:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this a lot. It's wonderfully odd and sarcastic. Bah, I hate tv, with the exception of PBS, the History Channel, etc.
    | Posted on 2004-04-01 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      It changed the world and poets get to watch it implode - like a Tube or maybe eight.
    Control by remote.
    Reins on your parade.
    Acid tongue.
    K
    | Posted on 2004-04-01 00:00:00 | by Awkward | [ Reply to This ]


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