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    dots Submission Name: From Video Bizzardots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 851
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       This guy I feel like I am stalking just won't get out of my head...part of the words in this came from my dream so they are kinda like allusions to that...I don't know I feel kinda out of it...tell me what you think.


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    dotsFrom Video Bizzardots
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    I put the picture on the shelf
    expected you to look at me
    see through the techniolor world
    and maybe love me like I do you

    I heard my dreams tell a story
    half expected you to reach out
    my reality is blurred and you are so far away

    I heard you when you whispered last night
    do you hate me
    I am bleeding

    why do you let us get so far away
    how do I love you when you don't know my name




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      This poem...confuses me. I mean, I usually understand things like this but, um, I'll give it my best try. It looks like you love someone but they might not love you or not love you as much. Sorry, I'm not quite sure. It was good though. I enjoyed it very much.
    | Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by manwithnoname | [ Reply to This ]
      It is a good poem, I just think it may be missing a few details. but maybe not. it does make since, it just seems to be missing something though. i do like it.
    | Posted on 2005-03-21 00:00:00 | by Heather12 | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah, Ive been there. Ive actually... Well, I wouldn't say stalked; rather sidled till being noticed, many girls in my day. the more they see you the more they want you. I believe psychologists call it the mere exposure affect... Yeah, it doesnt always work, ha ha.
    -Trouble
    | Posted on 2005-03-21 00:00:00 | by Death of Death | [ Reply to This ]
      great piece i liked the question of who am i and the concept of your thought very nice display of words in a short but simplistic way
    sandman
    | Posted on 2005-03-21 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey whoever this guy is you need to let him know that you like him a lot. I know that it's a risk but hey you never know what if he like you too and you didn't even know it. Thats how Justin and I discovered our feelings for each other. He didn't know I liked him until he asked me out. Follow what your heart is telling you. Hey even if he don't like you theres nothing wrong with being just friends. You may find out something about yourself after that. Like maybe your stronger than you know. I don't judge people because of things thats happend to them so don't worry maybe this guy will discover he likes you too and he not even know it.
    | Posted on 2005-03-22 00:00:00 | by manda_bear | [ Reply to This ]


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