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Depression is unusual for me


Author: manda_bear
ASL Info:    24;f; alabama
Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 57 /64 /23
Words: 109
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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Depression is unusual for me



Depression is unusual for me
I have my reasons why I am in this mood
Right now
I cry and know that they
Do not care to hear it
Sadness has overcome my happiness
Because of a life I wish has never began
Not my life, but a relatives life
Not wishing death upon them, but wishing a better life for them
Depression is unusual for me
Because I am always happy
The happiness has been replaced by pain and sadness
How long will this last? I don't know
Depression is unusual for me
But depression will not drive me to my death
It will only make me stronger




Submitted on 2005-03-21 15:28:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow, i like how you said that it would only make you stronger and you keep reminding the reader of what poem title is, usually i like rhyming poems but you like some others, are so good that they dont need to rhyme to persuade us readers... good job on this. i like it a lot.

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| Posted on 2005-03-22 00:00:00 | by necrotic | [ Reply to This ]
  this seems to be a great venting peice, to be honest thou it isn't that much like poetry, I think thoough you have a great start, because clearly the emotion is there and the idea is present. I am sorry that you are goingthrough some hared times, just remember that things eventually will have to get better, for the world works in cycles, anyways if you need a listening ear just PM meand i'll do whAT i CAN, HANG IN There, and take care.
much love
kaity
| Posted on 2005-03-21 00:00:00 | by Kaitylizzy | [ Reply to This ]
  this seems to be a great venting peice, to be honest thou it isn't that much like poetry, I think thoough you have a great start, because clearly the emotion is there and the idea is present. I am sorry that you are goingthrough some hared times, just remember that things eventually will have to get better, for the world works in cycles, anyways if you need a listening ear just PM meand i'll do whAT i CAN, HANG IN There, and take care.
much love
kaity
| Posted on 2005-03-21 00:00:00 | by Kaitylizzy | [ Reply to This ]
  I would never look upon you bdly are you wrote to me. Everyone goes through periods of time when they get down when family and other things just totally drive you insane,yet too many things are out of your control.

Your poem does speak clearly of your frustations and depress mood.

Overall it written good, These kinds of poems are more venting then trying to be something great.

Your a great person with an awesome b/f who loves and adore you.
| Posted on 2005-03-21 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
  It seems you have your thoughts organized well, but this would be best in prose form. There's nothing poetically stylistic about this, except that it has no periods. Poetry is a conscious effort at presenting your feelings, your ideas in a way that you have never thought of before. It is the job of the author to leave something for the reader to analyze and get some deeper meaning out of. But what would be a deeper meaning in this poem is already stated outright.

I think you have good material just put it into poetry.
| Posted on 2005-03-21 00:00:00 | by Ziplock006 | [ Reply to This ]


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