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    dots Submission Name: Red Socks and Black Underweardots

    Author: playcrackthesky
    ASL Info:    21/f/IA
    Elite Ratio:    4.46 - 463/457/88
    Words: 165
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsRed Socks and Black Underweardots

    He said
    Donít try to kiss your way out of this
    With those blood red lips of yours

    From those fairy tales

    If I had your magic
    Iíd fly away

    He said
    Donít try to kiss your way out of this
    With those blood red lips of yours

    So letís run
    Lets fly

    Away from those summer lies
    And fairy tales you told

    Raining helped us fall
    But swimming brought us back

    Ever so close

    He said
    Donít try to kiss your way out of this
    With those blood red lips of yours

    Letís not run from this
    Use your magic kiss
    To bring me to my knees

    Letís not fly from this
    Use your magic kiss
    To bring me to my knees

    I canít help this feeling
    I canít help myself

    You are all I have

    So letís end this night
    With a kiss.

    Submitted on 2005-03-21 15:56:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I also wanted to say that the usage of the lines:

    "Don't try to kiss your way out of this
    with those blood red lips of yours"

    ...was good. A lot of people use certain words or phrases over and over in a poem to attempt to get a point across. In some poems it seems over done, in others, not done enough. In this poem, it's just about right.

    | Posted on 2006-01-07 00:00:00 | by Ravenwood | [ Reply to This ]
      I wasn't quite sure what to think this poem would be about after reading the title. It's a very simple poem with few words, but the effect was well felt. I think the use of short 2 line stanzas helped keep the simplicity. If the poem had been jumbled up into one long poem without breaks between the lines it wouldn't be the poem that it is.

    | Posted on 2006-01-07 00:00:00 | by Ravenwood | [ Reply to This ]
      This was very nice indeed. Definate shades of MCR there and maybe some others of note, but the title and words gave me a definate emo feel, which is always cool. Not much else to say really, very simple, easily comprehendable, a solid write. Nice work!
    | Posted on 2005-04-16 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...i totally thought this was gonna be about the boston red sox or something...damn baseball...figure it out, huh? well im not too good with that type of stuff-tho i do like it, a lot...nice job, my friend.
    | Posted on 2005-03-21 00:00:00 | by brokenmirror | [ Reply to This ]

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