Description: Another set of song lyrics, although this one is about two years old. Once again, the bolded lines are the chorus. Any comments would be lovely. (And yes, I was depressed when I wrote this...)
I will say this like Rhett said in gone with the wind, frankly my dear I don't give a damn if someone hates your writting. I LOVE YOUR WRITTING! It's crafty. I think you should continue to post things on here forever. I look forward to reading more of your works. You have a natural talent. Keep up the good work. Thank you for blessing me with the presence of your passion whick lies within your writting.
Nice poem ;0) I have read your poem a couple of times and like the flow you have in this particular poem. It is nice to read even though it is quite simple in its structure and use of words, did it not bothered me at all ;0) If I may suggest something in the first stanza, it would be:
I’m lost I’m found I’m hidden all around Hope has fallen Crashed to the ground You’ve gone I’m (all) alone Tears fall - remove (again)
Submission Name: Hopeless Tears
