Description: Just something I wrote one night at 2 am, feeling good about myself and telling everyone else to go to hell. Playing with rhythm a bit...
Confidence Games -------------------------------------------
I donít need to look like Barbie to be lovely
And this way Iím even cuddly
You wonít be ripped apart by my angles
The only thing sharp is my tongue
And thatíll spin you in circles
Make you call to the angels
Sorry honey- but God has nothing to do with it
And isnít it funny
How when Iím inside you
You could care less how big my ass is
And no matter how hard you come
Iíll never be good enough to bring home to mom and dad
Thatís too bad
They wouldíve fucking loved me
The honesty and crudeness in your style is wonderful, not everything has to be covered up by metaphors. here this has also let the subject in the poem really put forward alot of character of her personality. The last line was the best in the whole poem as it really showed here confidence in herself. Really liked it,
i truely love your no-holding back style. just [censored] blunt messages. you seem to be struggling with a relationship that relies on sex. ugh i've been there. it hurts to think that you're not good enough in someone elses eyes to make sacrifice. from what i'ce gathered from you you're a lesbian right? i'm only bringing this up because it seems as though this has something to do with the over all meaning of the piece. "this has nothing to do with god" alot of your conservative mind [censored] cristians(no offense to cristianity, just those types of people) think that god hates people who are gay. like seriously what the [censored] is up with that. The bottom line is according to christian standards the only time you're suppose to have sex period is to have children, so ugh. well anyways that's what that line brings to mind. and the end seems like you saying. "no matter how good the sex is i'll always be an embarassement to you. and maybe you're the one who's ashamed or condesending." ok i'm young and i've only been in 2 relationships so my advice is probably bad. but luckily for me those 2 relationships where pretty bad so i've been in a similar enough situation to say that perhaps you really need to find someone else. Bottom line is that if someone causes you hurt, then you shouldn't have to deal with it. Sometimes, especially in relationships, it's better to think about protecting yourself. only reason i'm saying this is because i know that as for the last 2 years of a 3 year relationship i was in the same boat and i feel better being alone then being in a relationship that i was in. and sorry for the advice type commentary, not normally my bag, but this seems sincere and i take that seriously.
d@mn! i love this poem! i can so relate to this situation. the narcissistic undertones pull together so nicely without making it sound bit<hy. once again, you've done a fu<king awesome job. girl, you kick @ss! keep it up! hugs and dildos, ~*dark_and_dreary*~
I love this poem. I'm starting to become a fan. Frightening concept. -.- I wouldn't change a thing. Your personality just shines--snide, sassy, crude, honest. Plus you dis Barbie in the first sentence. That's a hook right there. Faving this.