Description: epipsyche- concept of love in literature; quest for a sympathetic entity, for one's "other half" past and present, in several cultures.
I found this in a notebook. I don't recall writing it, but it's in my handwriting and dated 1-03-05. I think I'll dedicate it to Cat and Nan too.
Learning the Language -------------------------------------------
Initially their bodies spoke in different tongues
instead of waiting for translations
they learned each other's body languages
from scratch like infants.
Their nerve impulses eventually rhymed
and their poem
of hips, hands, and mouths
became a mantra
and though their bodies separated
their souls were one being,
a puzzle completed
by two epipsyches.
Again I must applaude the genius of your words...you've mastered saying just the right amount of stuff while creating a vivid landscape of thought. Thank you. I doubt I'll comment much more on your work because it's extremely hard to really critique, but I will say you are a fabulous author and I can't wait to find a poem of yours to add to my favorites.
This is good Amy, -I liked the epipsyche theme, and how it builds on the language metaphor, through to the mantra idea.That emp-hasizes the universality of the language of love,-just like dancing-you don't have to know the words of the song to dance in perfect synch with the right pard. I didn't read it before you changed the part about the infant, but for some reason I don't like the term "from scratch" here,-it reminds me of Cake Mix commercial,- but I do like the infant analogy, as babies also learn those first responses "up close and personal-face to face", and the image of maother and babe evokes the tender unconditional side of love. How sweet to dedicate to our favorite felines here. Sally
there are so many layers in this poem.. it's more complex than it first appears.. and it was very interesting to read.
the language analogy (as others have said) is the perfect way to describe two people coming to know each other.. that process of learning each other as you fall in love.. and there are so many levels to that going beyond just simple body language or lust.
I'm sure the "elite couple" will love this dedication. Very pretty. The only thing that throws me a bit is the infant reference. I mean, I totally understand where you're going with that, and it makes good sense, just that you then go on to write something very sexy, or at least sensual, so the infant word seems a bit out of place. I don't know...I guess it's kinda like making love with the baby in his crib next to the bed (not to say that we haven't done that)...
This is awfully good for you to have forgotten writing it just a couple months ago...get some sleep! ;)
Ah the rapport of body language. Greta when in tune with one another. "Their nerve impulses eventually rhymed" I like that line. It does feel quite latin, I agree. "And although teir bodies separated their souls were one being".
I can just picture these words being spoken over a piece of music: it has a distinct slow latin dance feel to it: the highlighting of certain features of the physical side of such a relationship compliments the chocie of words that lend to describe the emotional aspects of the loss of reason that accompanies such passion. I especially like the metaphor of the poem, as both poems and sex are an expression of inward emotion and desire. Good Job once again, thankyou for the read... Dave
i think that does help, the added words regarding the infant part. i didn't take it as sexual before, it just seemed disconnected to the rest of the poem. don't get me wrong, Amy. i didn't mean to imply that i didn't like this, 'cause i do. it speaks so true to what i feel about Nan and i, that we rhyme this way.
their poem Of hips, hands, and mouths Became a mantra
this was definitely a sensuous and unique take on love. I loved it immensely and I would even dare to apply to bonds of a purely emotional nature as well. I'm glad you found it in your notebook but I am surprised you don't remember writing it, because it is certainly impressive.
i could certainly relate to this one! thanks for the dedication, Amy. Nan and i were just talking about being intuitive when making love... not everyone is like that as a lover. we seem to rhyme quite well, Nan and i!!
i, too, had a bit of trouble with the infant reference. it throws it off just a tad. i also don't particularly like the reference to an addiction, because to me that is negative. i can see how someone can become an addiction, tho.
i have to go look up the last word, "epipsyches," although i can sort of divine what that means. good job on describing "learning the language" of love!
This is so darling! It sounds like your style of writing. :) I love it. It's cute you dedicated this to Nan and Cat too. This whole site sees their love and loves for them and with them. It's great that we can come together like that. :) I wish I could get more in-depth in this comment but it's storming like crazy and I don't want the computer to get knocked out before I post this. Great piece! Glad you posted it! Lots of hugs! -blt
This is really good and I can see how it can be written about Nan and Cat. But I am gonna have to agree with deadndreaming...what is with the infant reference? it just seems strange for the subjuct that you are writing about.
Hi Amy, wow, this really rings true in terms of how Cat and I relate. I see the infant reference sparked some controversy, but if you consider making love an art, no assumptions should guide actions. Being a tabula rasa makes perfect sense. OK, we must be Pebbles and BamBam, "she is my wow and zoom". We do rhyme, it's such a great way to say it. Thanks so much for the dedication too. Love and hugs galore, Nan