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    dots Submission Name: The Adamant Replydots
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    Author: The Gadfly
    ASL Info:    52/M/Moreno Valley, CA
    Elite Ratio:    3.55 - 1048/1348/375
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 589
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       ABAAB format, eight syllables per line. There is a play on words here, so don't get too excited about it.

    This poem is about the root of selfishness in Mankind.


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    dotsThe Adamant Replydots
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    Promiscuous adultery,
    no idle worship in this bed.
    In gorging members, fast and free,
    a feast on pickled perfidy
    and death, the nectar your gods spread.

    Tumultuous in vanity,
    heirs stand on end though fortunes pass
    through empty nests' profanity.
    All hail my gods! My god, it's me!
    A dead man gazes in the glass.

    Fortuitous through forgery,
    deflecting truth for specious needs,
    implanting palms through bribery,
    partaking spoils in robbery,
    sow wicked hearts, yield filthy seeds.

    Ingenuous in argument,
    the adamant make harsh demands,
    determined in this effort spent,
    three-nailed reply to God was sent,
    'No thank You, we have better plans.'


    The Gadfly




    Submitted on 2005-03-22 06:31:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can honestly say I enjoyed reading this work.
    "In gorging members, fast and free,
    a feast on pickled perfidy
    and death, the nectar your gods spread" great line! read in to it! I think I will, thats the fun part. Thank you for a piece that makes me think, this readable work that flows like the finest squid ink.
    | Posted on 2005-03-22 00:00:00 | by Deacon | [ Reply to This ]
      "three-nailed reply to God was sent" just leap of the screen at me and went through me like a knife! Fantastic rhyme and reason presentation that digs deep into your readers soul. Your writing is extremely polished and has the plus of being inspirational. I repeat you read as a person that has formal training/education such as writing verse on a professional level adhering to the many rules such as aabb..etc. smile and ~always love Cheryl
    | Posted on 2005-03-25 00:00:00 | by ladyngold | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes, as humans we do at times believe we are in totally control and find out later how foolish we are. Now your three-nails reply was such a great line,bravo bravo bravo, so slick and powerful driven ,pardon my pun.

    As always your bring God words in such a beautiful thought provoking poetic way with a flare.
    | Posted on 2005-03-22 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]


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