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Author: Deacon
Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 19 /23 /9
Words: 83
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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With a flick of my thumb the gleam runs down a nylon seam to meet with stiletto heals that stand in a gutter all covered with mans dirty appeal.

Paying to touch her skin that feels like a book tattered and unread. Not caring to read between the covers, to me shes trash payed to itch my rash. the one I call desire.

She closes her eyes to fullfill my need. Damn this shameful deed! Quietly parting from this sinfull greed.............

Submitted on 2005-03-22 08:14:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow... that's pretty much i ca come up with right now. it's such an imaginative piece, so flowing, and all in all so sad. it's hard to believe there really are people out there who would do that kind of thing, and also to think some people have to and that people feel like they have to pay for sex...very good piece... i really enjoyed it :)
| Posted on 2005-03-22 00:00:00 | by withouthope | [ Reply to This ]

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