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    dots Submission Name: Pitydots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsPitydots
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    People tell me to forget about you,
    but you are now part of the anatomy of my brain.
    Sometimes it feels like I'm thinking with your mind,
    I'm starting to like that dreadful singer you love.
    I read your godawful books and like them.
    It's almost like you are still here,
    but all I can hope is that you come back
    to me like a stray cat that I took pity on and fed.






    Submitted on 2004-04-01 08:41:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      creative that is for sure, in my opinion.
    The flow seemed to be smooth. And your poems message is very strong.
    | Posted on 2004-04-02 00:00:00 | by Vibrant | [ Reply to This ]
      the last line is powerful i really liked this poem, i feel an abundance of longing from it, missing something that you really dont care for anylonger, but still want it back. good write!
    | Posted on 2004-04-01 00:00:00 | by gigglygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      loved these lines,
    "Sometimes it feels like I'm thinking with your mind
    I'm starting to like that dreadful singer you love
    I read your godawful books and like them"
    like an awful tune that keeps playing in your head
    they invade your lives
    mess up with your mind
    stomp about on your feelings
    and leave
    pretty much like a kid
    who left his toys in the rain

    great write.
    | Posted on 2004-04-01 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]
      the end is great. I think we have all been in such a situation before. good piece.
    | Posted on 2004-04-01 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      The flow was awesome! Absolutely amazing, it seemed really thought out, but I bet it took you no time! Great Work!
    | Posted on 2004-04-01 00:00:00 | by ViCiOuSWrItEr | [ Reply to This ]


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