Smile of a Dead Child by darkness child

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Submission Name: Smile of a Dead Child dots

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Author:	darkness child
ASL Info:	17/F/Michigan
Elite Ratio:	3.08 - 195/265/47
Words:	84

Class/Type:	Poetry/You left me
Total Views:	324
Average Vote:	5.0000
Bytes:	578

Description:
I got hurt. Again. And I was soooo careful this time. Why am I so easily manipulated? I'm tired of getting dumped by every guy that asks me out. So fucking tired of it.

Smile of a Dead Child dots

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Hurt me, so softly.
Kill me, the dead child.
Break me into pieces,
And still I will smile.

Still, I will love you.
I can't control my heart.
It's shattered, because you hate me,
Betrayal ripping me apart.

Bloody blankets will suffice,
My weakened state of broken dreams.
Every breath I take is ice,
I smile, but it's not what it seems.

Apathy is my addiction,
Perfection is my goal.
I smile, but only to hide,
The darkness in my soul.

Submitted on 2005-03-22 15:53:48 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  "Apathy is my addiction,
Perfection is my goal.
I smile, but only to hide,
The darkness in my soul."

These lines are so haunting and familiar, so real, most likely because it sounds like a description of me. I’m sorry that you feel this way, especially over a guy; they seem to make life so difficult and painful. I hope things get better and you fine someone who can make you feel as beautiful, wonderful and special as you are and that you’re still able to trust them despite the morons you had to go through to get to him. Overall the poem was great, good job. ~Obsidian Embers
| Posted on 2006-07-01 00:00:00 | by Obsidian Embers | [ Reply to This ]
  thanx for you comment on revenge i am glad you enjoyed your poem has a place inside me for when i read it it reminded me of my grandaughters death thanx for sharing great soul read and thought
sandman
| Posted on 2005-04-19 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow, I like this very much. Great rhymes and I loved the way you had with words. You had a great way to tell your message too. This is really good overall. My favorite part is: "Hurt me, so softly.
Kill me, the dead child.
Break me into pieces,
And still I will smile."
Which makes me think that, this doesn't only happen to people that break up or get dumped, you can even live this while being in a relationship, and I say this because of a personal experience. Only thing I can tell you is, to have some pride for yourself and protect your heart and feelings, open up slowly to people and then after some time, you can start being completely open to them. Sometimes when we give our all, we need to be sure of who the receiver is and if he deserves it. If you find that guy, feel free to open up your heart, and I'll be sure he'll treat you right.
| Posted on 2005-03-22 00:00:00 | by April0414 | [ Reply to This ]
  These indeed is dark expression. The meat of this poem is its content. Gloom and doom reflects successfully from your words. Also confusion. " Pefection is my goal..." stands alone and out of place in this poem. Hopefully it is the title of a positive poem you are soon to write.
| Posted on 2005-03-22 00:00:00 | by ladyngold | [ Reply to This ]
  Breakups do suck ass. Sometimes even when we are careful we find ourselves face down on the ground again. But life is getting up and keep on going. Don't worry, sooner or later you will find someone. Besides, your young, think of it as...preparation.
~Ma
Ps~ "Every breathe I take is ice,"
I believe its breath. Sorry..I am such a freak when it comes to spelling! Did I say this was a good poem? Yes it was a very good poem and I liked it. Keep writing!
| Posted on 2005-03-22 00:00:00 | by MorbidAngel114 | [ Reply to This ]
  i almost cried ...well now i am crying i know it seems pretty pathetic for me saying this but i enjoyed your poem and have had a similar experience like this

Apathy is my addiction,
Perfection is my goal.

my favorite piece of your poem

hope you have better luck
| Posted on 2005-03-22 00:00:00 | by Lucy L. | [ Reply to This ]

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