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    dots Submission Name: "LOADS OF EUPHORIA"dots
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    Author: LameMansTerms
    ASL Info:    36/M/Hermosa Beach, Ca
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 713/1012/165
    Words: 45
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1240
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    Description:
       just some thoughts
    ~L.t


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    dots"LOADS OF EUPHORIA"dots
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    i want to be in that place
    that place you hold sacred
    where nothing is hidden
    and everyone lies naked
    as extasy is given
    over and over again
    until loads of euphoria
    paint that world
    in which i wouldn’t
    mind living

    LameMansTerms





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      well this is something diffrent i'd have to say from the other stuff i've read of yours...i think i like this one alot because its such raw emotion ...so honest...almost romantic...lol...and me being cheesy like that lovs this type of stuff...not that i don't like your other stuff don't get me wrong...we need all kinds of writing to inspire us make us laugh make us think...bring back memories ect. ect...,sorry babbling haven't had enough coffee to actually function but i'm leaving you a comment anyways...sorry babbling...shut up and get back to the write...hehe...i love the fact you were able to say so much in so few words...i read it and was seriosly like wow...it was truly outstanding...sometimes these small thoughts we randomly write somewhere thinking its nothing more than just thoughts...hence your description end up being something really good...i have no complaints...purps
    | Posted on 2005-05-03 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
      dude, we're all loking for a world where we can be ourselves without having to wear a mask (or costume).
    ~Jess
    P.S. and like everyone else has said, you spelt ecstacy wrong! Change it please!
    | Posted on 2005-03-30 00:00:00 | by shmuzzelle | [ Reply to This ]
      pssst...you spelled ecstasy wrong. Mags
    Now I have to say something else so that it will let me post. Yada, yada, yada...blah blah blah, Night Night.
    | Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by Magnolia | [ Reply to This ]
      Another side of you Mike. I enjoyed this one and I feel like you are really branching out and trying on different roles and voices. That is to be admired, my friend. You have said alot with just a few words and managed to make it sensual and sexy without being overt or crass. It is thrilling to leave things to the imagination. This is so different from your other pieces, I was delighted to read it. You know I am a fan anyway, but it was a nice change of pace. Cheers...Mags
    | Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by Magnolia | [ Reply to This ]
      again a nice write, this one short and direct! i like. the title is very interesting and once you read the poem and go back and break down the title you view it in a whole new light. one would assume the person adores this place as you use strong emotional words such as ecstasy, naked, sacred....all very strong and paints a picture of desire. the title, however implies something of the same nature, but different. i knew what euphoria meant but i looked it up for a deeper meaning....an exaggerated feeling of happiness. so now this desire is just exaggerated which helps one understand the contradiction of the strong emotion with the weak emotion of the line "wouldn't MIND living" when one would assume by instinct that you would be ecstatic to live here if it is as lovely as you describe it.
    Ecstasy is also a uniquely chosen word because it means intense delight, which also clashes with the exaggerated happiness.
    i liked this poem, interesting
    | Posted on 2005-03-23 00:00:00 | by Tinasha | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay, very orgy-riffic, but otherwise I could find a lot of subliminal meaning in this one. Whether its a sex thing a drug thing or a rock and roll thing I don't care, the point is, I feel Dionysis in this one. "Dead cat, dead rats, think you're an aristocrat" -Well maybe thats just me. I'm a bit of a Dionysian myself. Actually I'm a fullblood. "Yeaahh the day destroy the night, night divide the day, try to run, try to hide..."

    Anyway I liked the piece, it made me want sex drugs and rock and roll, good job. lol -sin
    | Posted on 2005-03-22 00:00:00 | by sinmore | [ Reply to This ]
      wouldn't that be nice? to live in a world of euphoria... unfortunately, that won't happen anytime soon, but it's nice to imagine.

    "i want to be in that place
    that place you hold sacred
    where nothing is hidden
    everyone lies naked"

    hmm... makes you think doesn't it?
    | Posted on 2005-03-22 00:00:00 | by Phoenix2004 | [ Reply to This ]
      nirvana...i would love to live in that world...
    complete serenity with no worries...maybe
    i'll find it in the next one i encounter...
    peace...
    btw, i think you misspelled ecstasy...

    Pestiferous
    | Posted on 2005-03-22 00:00:00 | by pestiferous | [ Reply to This ]
      LT

    I think this is probably one of the best ones I have read of yours so far. I liked it, doesnt matter how long it takes to write it. This is actually really beautiful, although I wonder if the subject matter isnt related to your last one "the pants one" ;) But then again, not matter what it is actually about, you have painted a really attractive picture of it. I like this side of you.

    BTW did you mean "I wouldnt mind living (in)"?

    Nurple
    | Posted on 2005-03-22 00:00:00 | by pinurplepassion | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked your rhyme of sacred and naked. Trips off the tongue like a nursery rhyme with adult themes.

    Sort of brings up the image of an orgy of carefree bliss. Wouldn't mind living there...although the comedown's a [censored] when you realize that's not real life, but a lie told by EX, Coke, some girl. For a moment though, you believe it could be reality...cool...much enjoyed.
    | Posted on 2005-03-25 00:00:00 | by marysunshine | [ Reply to This ]


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