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    dots Submission Name: Came this far for nothingdots
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    Author: medicated
    ASL Info:    18
    Elite Ratio:    3.28 - 269/369/98
    Words: 224
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 1325
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    Bytes: 1330



    Description:
       It's something i feel right now... it's about my pain and suffering i still feel since rachel hurt me.........


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    dotsCame this far for nothingdots
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    All your promises
    you couldn't keep
    but i kept all the peices
    to tape up my dreams

    and how far did i have to come
    before you knew how to play me
    and how far did you want me to bleed,
    until i could not be?

    And i know i can't believe
    when ya say that you
    won't burn my world down again
    but i still keep all the ashes
    to hide away my tragedy

    and how far did i have to come
    before you knew how to play me
    and how far did you want me to bleed,
    until i could not be?

    Now I can't control
    my emotions or
    the way you make me feel
    and with you i can only see
    i came this far for nothing
    (nothing but forever suffering)

    And I don't know how to change
    when you still bring me pain
    and I can't help but feel like
    you still fail to be true when
    you've shadowed our love grey
    (when your promises break away)

    Now I can't control
    my future or
    my memories
    but you still make me feel
    like i came this far for nothing
    yeah you still make me feel
    like i came this far for nothing
    (nothing but a tragedy)




    Submitted on 2005-03-23 02:58:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      mt fav line is "but i kept all the peices
    to tape up my dreams" it made me think of when i think at somei have things together and then it all comes smashing down and i still want it to be okay.also it reminds me of the manipulatons people can play.
    | Posted on 2005-04-29 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]
      WOAH! I think I might add this to my favorites! This is a good write...you put all your emotion into this poem and thats just incredible
    | Posted on 2005-03-24 00:00:00 | by demonickitten87 | [ Reply to This ]
      hey this was a powerful poem and it seems that you pourd so much emotion into it!this poem seems like you were played by some one you loved and it hurt you really bad. i think that it is nice that not only gurls can pour there little hearts out and write poems that are strong and emotional but boys can to
    so if you ever wanna talk look me up
    gothic_witch
    | Posted on 2005-03-24 00:00:00 | by gothic_witch | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, this was an excellent peice i really mean it. this will make an awesome song. i like how you ended it with the "(nothing but a tragedy)" that was really great. i really dont know what else to say about this peice except again that it is really awesome! great job. :)
    | Posted on 2005-03-23 00:00:00 | by _Joeysgirl_ | [ Reply to This ]


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