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The Saint


Author: Lil_Santo
ASL Info:    19=I
Elite Ratio:    3.31 - 34 /52 /15
Words: 163
Class/Type: Rant /
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Lil Santo......he might be little but he ain't a Saint.....


The Saint



I've grown lickin toast bread for fun
staring into the ultra violet rays of the sun
my eyes aren't blind and I do have a mind
but I guess I just left my sanity behind
I mean come on....I'm a Saint?
if you could take one look at me you would know
I ain't...
I'm a gangster? well I dress like one
but my cousin is the only fool who totes around a gun
I don't care what kind of girl I get
I mean crack head ashed up I don't give a shit
and to be honest with you
I don't care if she's std'd too
cause I guarentee that if I tap that ass
she'll probably have something worse then she already has
I'm like boiled onion water served with chocolate dip
everyone at the table looks but never takes a sip
and if they did they probably would regret it
the Names Lil Santo and for the rest...just forget it.




Submitted on 2005-03-23 09:08:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Wow. im guessing then your a rapper and a pretty good one at that. I love your whole pace in the poem. You've got a special talent. I love reading things like this because it almost makes you wanna get up and start rapping it yourself. Its such a cool smoothe piece too and i like the whole i dont care and rebel attitude. Cool man, keep that up
| Posted on 2005-03-23 00:00:00 | by freak_like_me | [ Reply to This ]
  I'm not a big fan of rap at all but still rap is poetry and this one was pretty good...
Some of the things stated in this kind of made me wrinkle my nose up but they did prove your point quite nicely...

But in agreement... you could add some more imagery or such things to it... just a suggestion
-Alli
| Posted on 2005-03-23 00:00:00 | by Childoutspoken | [ Reply to This ]
  Execution of what appears to be rap/rant in rhyme and reason has been established in this piece. I feel the content is somewhat run of the mill. Having a teenager I have been exposed to much rap music some I like some I don't. Is this piece an bio of yourself or is it just meant to incite some type of reaction for its reader or both? In all cases this ranting needs more imagery and power to move me.
| Posted on 2005-03-23 00:00:00 | by ladyngold | [ Reply to This ]
  well this was a humorus post to let people know you just don't give a sh&t.

I don't know about the whole std thang though you kinda threw me off and made me say uhhhhh with that one but hey *shrug* that's what we all want when someone reads our posts right?...a reaction...

anyhoo overall a good write I could picture you thugged out flippin a finger while slammin these words...
| Posted on 2005-03-23 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]


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