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    dots Submission Name: News @ 10dots

    Author: SammySueYou
    ASL Info:    23/f/nm
    Elite Ratio:    3.05 - 90/78/30
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angst
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       I wrote this poem a while back when I was watching the news at 10....Everytime I watch the news something else that is horrible happens.

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    dotsNews @ 10dots

    I turned on the news at ten oclock ,
    All of these bad things happening puts me through shock.
    A gay guy attacked because of his taste ,
    a species extinction caused by toxic waste.
    A molested child left for dead ,
    a wandering pedestrian shot in the head.
    A crazed lunatic out on the loose ,
    a piece of glass found in a childs juice.
    A bullied teen brings a gun to school ,
    an old man commits suicide with a powertool.
    A meth lab explosion kills eight cops ,
    celebrities on live t.v. take off their tops.
    A victim gets killed by a hit and run driver ,
    a shark attacks a first timing diver.
    A bomb goes off in an unlikely place ,
    a black man gets murdered because of his race.
    Tonight on the news at ten ,
    the world goes to hell again.

    Submitted on 2005-03-23 11:12:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was a good reality check, this is why I stopped watcing the news because everytime they seem like they're trying to scare you or evoke fear in you. I liked how you also gave the motive of each event which was even more shocking because they were clearly not justified. Good work.
    | Posted on 2007-08-15 00:00:00 | by 7makaveli | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, This is amazing. I wish that i had read this even sooner. I didnt think that it would be that interesting..but this is awesome. I wish that i were as talented as you. You amaze me..i am adding this one..wow.
    | Posted on 2005-04-09 00:00:00 | by longwinterdays | [ Reply to This ]
      This is great! So real and good flow and rhyming here too. It's funny because I was just feeling this way myself- more than usual today. The Teri Shiavo thing and the school shooting, and I had a patient yesterday who's son hung himself. Its all so overwelming and your poem illustrates that frustration and also the disensitizing effect it has on so many especially mocked/ portrayed in "Tonight on the news at ten ,
    the world goes to hell again." As if to say it like your repeating a preview clip said by an anchorman- saying it like its exciting to see a glimps of hell or like its become the new norm. A satire in a way. Anyway I really enjoyed it.
    | Posted on 2005-03-23 00:00:00 | by Gatita | [ Reply to This ]
      i love your poem because of the fact that its so real...people do get killed bcuz of race and taste in sexes...i hate that the world is this way...but i love the way your poem ends with "tonight on the news at ten, the world goes to hell again"becaus i've always thought that everyday we live the world become another living hell for someone somewhere
    | Posted on 2005-03-23 00:00:00 | by Krinchinian | [ Reply to This ]
      the title of your poem intrigued me to read the poem and i am happy that i read your poem. So much truth! well-captured, really...i thnk i should add it to my favs:)
    | Posted on 2005-03-23 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really realistic. I hate the news and so I don't watch it, everytime I turn it on something has happened to prove that America is so far from Paradice and I hate having that reminder. This is something everyone can relate to because it effects everyone. Good job, I htink I'll add it to my faves list.

    Blessed Be!
    | Posted on 2005-03-23 00:00:00 | by Sarah Leger | [ Reply to This ]

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