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Allison Jaye


Author: Lil_Santo
ASL Info:    19=I
Elite Ratio:    3.31 - 34 /52 /15
Words: 158
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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The Saint.....


Allison Jaye



late night...december 12th to be exact
I was stickin to a wall better than a thumbtac
Listen to moonlight wizzing by
looking down in a window kind of like a spy
didn't have much to base my curiousity off
I shouldn't make a peep I shouldn't make a cough
an angel watching someone in need of help
feeling with my heartbeat the brain under her scalp
like the night...I watched as she bathed with the hour
God has sent me now, a final rush of power
stepping out the tub I teleport to the bathroom
smiling and laughing reversing all gloom
I dreamed of this neck, I dreamed of this night
to free your soul and give you wings for flight
I hugged it, hugged it with the hope
that you'll be mine forever to cheer me when I mope
but as I let go....and the your love didn't stay
I'll just let you decay...beautiful Allison Jaye




Submitted on 2005-03-23 11:15:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Holy freaking crap that... RAWR! If you were going to write something about me I wish you would have said so ~_^. I was actually going to reply to the message you left me.. when I saw my name and I was like "Oh my" so I had to read it.
I wonder who this person is who has the same name as me and spelled the exact same way... how strange.
But this was a very pretty piece for a love piece, even though the ending is very sad...
-Alli
| Posted on 2005-03-23 00:00:00 | by Childoutspoken | [ Reply to This ]


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