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The modern outfit

Author: caspian
ASL Info:    23/m/Denmark
Elite Ratio:    2.31 - 134 /189 /57
Words: 51
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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The modern outfit


Prove the vintage wrong
The record store is your hore
when kids are buing words worse than war
whats more
when pathetic competitions rules our wisdom
what they become has made tomorrow
what we became has made their sorrow

Submitted on 2005-03-23 14:09:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This was pretty good, the onlything is that the spelling on this was really off but many people do that for a reasone so I'm not complaining.
| Posted on 2005-03-23 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]
  i liked this poem, my only complaint is the second line, but other then that it was great, i enjoyed reading it,
-rock on!
| Posted on 2005-03-23 00:00:00 | by catie jo | [ Reply to This ]
  The record store is my hore?? wierd ok i liked it but it seems like ur mad or not i dunt kno
the spelling was off and it was kinda weird
| Posted on 2005-03-23 00:00:00 | by Star | [ Reply to This ]

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