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    dots Submission Name: The Warningdots
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    Author: SKillz_Heckle
    ASL Info:    21/Male/Tha BRIARWOOD!!
    Elite Ratio:    6.02 - 268/173/39
    Words: 528
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 224
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 3230



    Description:
       probably gonna get a bunch of people saying
    This isn't technically sounds and the rhymes are repetitive...Don't understand it...OH WELL


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    dotsThe Warningdots
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    To Rhymes God who's no more than a parasite
    you sucked the lifeforce out my patience tonite
    the paper who thanks you is as blind as the dead
    the confidence you have is misplaced and mislead
    and as I read the writings enscribed here on this site
    remedies were prescribed by my mind to cure the trite
    arrogance......I know all about it
    for a while I as you were and the people allowed it
    told me to hold the rhyme and never live without it
    sold me a new faith that was never outted
    And as the Lich desended to deal with the greedy
    the sixth was spotted and there will be no treaty
    you're as needy for attention as a female dog in heat
    and the rhymes you kick were no lick so now taste defeat
    and after you do spit it out and taste it again
    for the after here is not about a rhyme, and is not a trend
    the ghetto slang spewing from you lyrical oriphis is clogged up
    and the limelight spectrallesys you speak of is hogged up
    not by the Greatest to ever touch the mic
    but by the Villian ex2. ruining you controlling your psyche
    The Girls you have with you are no more than holographic illusions
    riding in the backseat of your pinto just scitzophrantic delusions
    pollution's all you could ever hold to that petty nameplate
    just another fake muther fucko using a maintstream template
    and my psychotic mindstate will be used to dispose of an ingrate
    and as you dissipate into a thick cloud of vapors
    and fly into a realm of long lost and forgotten papers
    I just want you to know this one little itty bitty shitty thing
    you can't be helped by Jay-Z, or any amount of Bling Bling
    you can threaten to roll up my street if you want
    bust off shots at my house while at the same time in your backseat I haunt
    go ahead try to flaunt your lyrical stylings
    just another folder in the dead column cabinet filings
    I'll skim over you like perusing through the bible
    using the ancient ink to paint my face looking trible
    I'm ready to do battle, I'm ready to die
    I may be extremely bad, and make you extremely cry
    with blood tears coming out your eyes
    and a last rhyme out your mind as the rapping spirit dies
    burn your remains and stew you brains
    my lyrics run through you like subway trains
    slowly desolving any and all entrails
    like a victim of a forest slasher...just another one of those campfire tales
    so please little man spare me a hook
    I went from a believer...to believing your're a time crook
    and when the book closes I hope you remember
    the Lich doesn't cut...mame or dismember
    rather
    he stops your mind and melts your eyeballs
    deteorates your tongue as you let out your pleading calls
    turns your hands into sand as you hold yourself up against walls
    and breaks you like a mirror as your body falls
    and you disappear like a passing fad
    I may be extremely bad, but you're lyrically sad.........
    Thank you.....Bitch




    Submitted on 2005-03-23 16:18:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Okay first of all I have to admit I had no idea what linch meant...now I do...second who is this piece directed at? is it at "someone" or is it at God? I guess I just was a little bit lost with this which happens sometimes so if you have the time find me...and explain to me so i can understand.
    | Posted on 2005-03-23 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]


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