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your place


Author: mimi
ASL Info:    30/f/ny
Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 597 /390 /111
Words: 61
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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im working on the title and on giving it more .... or adding it to I Fell.


your place



Your touch felt right.
Held me tight.
through the night.
Gentle as light.

Your voice,
the silky sexy sounds
sends shivers
spirling through my spine.

I close my eyes,
and to my surprise
I find that you
have wrestled your way
to nestle and stay
deep inside me.








Submitted on 2005-03-23 21:59:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  You seem to write a lot about cudling and sexual stuff... you must be a very sensual person looking for something maybe. I liked this one it was light and kind of matter of fact, like you were there but conscience of what was going on and not caught up in the moment.
| Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by Al | [ Reply to This ]
  Very physical, and realationships need more that that, but your style is good and since you wanted first impressions: I would read another of yours.
| Posted on 2005-03-24 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]
  i don't think this is sensual or sexual. yeah, obviously the connotations are there, but i think what is going on between these two surpasses the physical realm. the rhyme is great, the structure is great, the alliterations are great, it flows, it captures your attention, and it gets A+++++++ from me.
| Posted on 2005-03-24 00:00:00 | by treybur | [ Reply to This ]
  I close my eyes,
and to my surprise
I find that you
have wrestled your way
to nestle and stay
deep inside me.

...a deja vu for me. Instantly reminds me of someone.

Good work!
| Posted on 2005-03-24 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]
  AGREEING WITH MMISS. SO SENUAL but at the same time gentle. hmmmmmmm.........love it! a work of art!

Your touch felt right.
Held me tight.
through the night.
Gentle as light.

Your voice,
the silky sexy sounds
sends shivers
spirling through my spine.

I close my eyes,
and to my surprise
I find that you
have wrestled your way
to nestle and stay
deep inside me.

Blessed Be!
| Posted on 2005-03-23 00:00:00 | by Sarah Leger | [ Reply to This ]
  WOW THIS IS VERY POWERFUL AND SENSUAL.

I close my eyes,
and to my surprise
I find that you
have wrestled your way
to nestle and stay
deep inside me.

THAT'S SPINE TINGLING! GREAT POEM HERE.
| Posted on 2005-03-23 00:00:00 | by MMISS | [ Reply to This ]


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