Description: I wrote this with a mixture of myself and some of my friends relationships in mind......i think the last line is to long but i couldnt figure out what else to put there so i guess itll have to be okay
The words you say... -------------------------------------------
What you said was a little too rough
and dumb excuses just arent enough
to make me believe the words you say
they wont make the pain just fade away
so tell me it wasnt what you meant
tell me that im heaven sent
but actions speak louder than words
and you just kicked me to the curb
but ill always love you you should know that
your problem is I wont take you back
not after what you did to me
Im not a puppet and I cant be controlled by a bunch of strings
I like this poem, it is true that people don't always come out and say what you want them to say...good job! You need to work on the last three lines thoughm make the point very clear...your words are a window to your soul, show people what's there.
i like this poem but i dont really like the last line! thats just my opinion! i can get you feel on this poem and i like it a lot i can relate but its just the last line! GOOD JOB!
Submission Name: The words you say...
