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    dots Submission Name: There...but notdots
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    Author: ForsakenAngel
    ASL Info:    19/F/Arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    6.37 - 147/73/18
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
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    dotsThere...but notdots
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    I see a person,
    standing in my view.
    Who is this person?
    Who am I???

    I hear words,
    but they are faint.
    Then again the figure comes...
    Who are you?
    Why are you here??
    Say something!!!

    The figure starts to slowly fade,
    I run towards it...
    The figure is me, but...
    How?!?!

    I am the one fading from view.
    Why don't people see me?
    To them I am nobody.
    I do not belong.
    Someone who is there...
    but not!!!




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      this is alright...pretty typical though, don't take this the wrong way windy, you know I love you!, but lemme offer you some advice,

    do sumthing that people don't expect of you say things ahead of your time, I read the comments and they all mentioned things bout your age, and how its typical for a person your age to feel that type of emotion...I""m not sayin don't feel this emotion...because that would be hard to change...but you should take the emotion and look at it from every perspective, then write...then you can write in different ways, You feel me?

    once again, please don't take it that I don't like your writing, I'm juss trying to help you to write "ahead of your time", I'm curious to see, wwhat your interpretation is of that through your writing...however I don't fully expect you to take my advice. so its alright of you choose not to.

    deuce up and much luv
    Jsells
    | Posted on 2006-07-14 00:00:00 | by maninthemirror | [ Reply to This ]
      hey it good i dont really understand it all but i know what you mean by it you wish people would see you for who you are i hope im right and lets try to be friends for her it will end up killing me but lets try and way ok

    palin
    | Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by palin_white | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay I understand this, especially at your age, it makes perfect sense in how you are treated as a young person it's discriminatory in the truest sense of the word, or maybe it's just about your family not paying attention to you, or maybe your friends, or people at school. None of my concern, my job is to comment on your piece. Good job. Very emotional and true, honest. -sin
    | Posted on 2005-03-24 00:00:00 | by sinmore | [ Reply to This ]


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