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    dots Submission Name: a lesser mandots

    Author: closetpoet
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 51/106/70
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsa lesser mandots

    accused i stand
    stripped and laid bare before the world
    the demons of my past cast lots
    for memories and that which i hold precious...

    crucified I am
    for the love i've shone
    for the tenderness and understanding
    that from my soul were born
    and finally the bitters offered
    i bleed for you...

    reborn in cynicism
    darkness replaces my soul
    a pain prevails and permeates
    the earthly flesh i know
    deny us thrice...
    i am alone

    Submitted on 2005-03-24 17:09:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked the title, because JC is less human than divine. Good job on all the crucifixion symbols woven in,

    -I especially liked the last, about his betrayal.
    "a pain prevails and permeates the earthly flesh i know
    deny us thrice...i am alone.

    It fades away like light when darkness overtakes so that seemed perfect to me,
    | Posted on 2005-04-26 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem was very interesting, and deep. I just read it over about five times. I like the way each paragragh ends. It pulls it all together. Very dark feeling.
    | Posted on 2005-04-19 00:00:00 | by ash20819 | [ Reply to This ]
      Is this suppose to be a religouse poem? It seems a lot like one but at the same time it could not be. I'm going to go with the latter becuse I usally hae religouse poems just becuse (yes, I'm mean and nasty) Good job, the whole thing flowed pretty good and it was intresting.
    | Posted on 2005-03-24 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]

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