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    dots Submission Name: a minute to latedots
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    Author: gypsy83
    ASL Info:    21/f/fl
    Elite Ratio:    3.14 - 49/66/24
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsa minute to latedots
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    i make a call but no ones home
    try to fill bordem with something stupid to get me by
    my little fingers typing away
    looking at weather, at porn maybe
    it all seems the same
    i figit around my seat
    on a caffine high to say the least
    while this light above me blinks and blinks
    i think its giving me a seisure
    maybe its my imagination creating ordeals
    just to keep me awake
    stretch a little, yawn
    look down at my shirt
    smooth it out over my breasts
    turn myself on...yawn...
    and here i still sit
    moths flying around my empty head
    the coffees getting to me now
    my stomach taking on the disguise of a rocky ship
    longing for these shackels to be cut
    that tie me to this dull disturbing desk
    at 6:38 the phone rings
    but this bordem has already swallowed me whole
    the call that came to save me
    a minute to late





    Submitted on 2005-03-24 17:48:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I wished for an explaintion to the meaning of this.. an inspiration of situation. I enjoyed reading it... a few grammatical errors (I have the same issue) but over all - I give it a 7 outta 10.
    | Posted on 2005-03-24 00:00:00 | by Isaac | [ Reply to This ]
      Most deff agree with J-IDENTITY, it's original. I wouldn't change a thing in this, it's awesome. Believe me I know boredom like that, maybe not the whole porn thing but most deff boredom. Hope something interesting happens!

    Blessed Be!
    | Posted on 2005-03-24 00:00:00 | by Sarah Leger | [ Reply to This ]
      i think it's original and alot of creativity, it's different and different is better than good. keep up the " different " work.
    | Posted on 2005-03-24 00:00:00 | by J-IDENTITY | [ Reply to This ]
      Er...I saw a few grammical mistakes. Lordy who am I to talk. It was alright, I got lost a few times so my advice to you, is spilt your words, make stanzas.
    | Posted on 2005-03-24 00:00:00 | by Karios | [ Reply to This ]


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