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    dots Submission Name: Secretsdots
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    Author: medicated
    ASL Info:    18
    Elite Ratio:    3.28 - 269/369/98
    Words: 167
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Angry
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    Description:
       LOL, its a song i wrote when i was stuck listenin to coutry with _Joeysgirl_ and i was pissed and everything was down...so about yeah, its somethin kinda about _Joeysgirl_, but its also about fake musicians.....enjoi


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    All your words I can hear
    Spinning around inside my torn up head
    and all they feel is in their mind 'cause
    they're not even real.

    It loves to tear me up inside with flames,
    The way you can just go on
    burnin the love i have for ya.
    I wish I could get so far or make
    your words go away from me.

    Did ya feel any love when ya
    really begged to bleed
    And you couldn't feel how
    everyone wants to hate ya.
    Did you want an easier way
    to take down everyone with you?

    It loves to tear me up inside with flames,
    The way you can just go on
    burnin the love i have for ya.
    I wish I could get so far or make
    your words go away from me.

    All the secrets in your words, they make me sick
    and it makes me sick how you can bring back the
    memories i hate.




    Submitted on 2005-03-25 07:58:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "All the secrets in your words, they make me sick
    and it makes me sick how you can bring back the
    memories i hate."

    I love that.
    You have a fan-f*cking-tastic amount of talent.
    The whole thing is wonderful.
    I especially like how you don't drift from the meaning just to try to make it rhyme. (I noticed a lot of people do that, so I figured I'd point it out.)
    I have nothing negative to say.

    Very beautifully done
    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2006-06-27 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      hmmm...not quite sure what to say about this one (especially since it is about me lol, but thats all good). for some reason im not too fond of the last two lines of the chorus, it just doesnt seem to flow too well to me, but thats just me im not a musician so i really dont know what im talkin bout lol. i liked the last stanza. it had a lot of feeling in it (but i would like to know what i could do to make any of this better). but yeah good write. :)
    | Posted on 2005-03-27 00:00:00 | by _Joeysgirl_ | [ Reply to This ]
      Loved the poem, and can identified with your poem...love gone all wrong. Good write :)

    "All your words I can hear
    Spinning around inside my torn up head
    and all they feel is in their mind 'cause
    they're not even real."...nice
    | Posted on 2005-03-25 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was aawesome.Prolly one of my favorites that you have ever did...did I tell you I talked to Justin Hill? He was actually bein kinda nice.But whatever cause it never lasts he always ends up [censored]in me out.
    | Posted on 2005-03-25 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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