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    dots Submission Name: Passion's Mirrordots
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    Author: Pyrosis
    ASL Info:    24/M/TN
    Elite Ratio:    4.13 - 199/204/35
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
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       well this is fairly simple.. last night i took my sister to the movies.. alot has happened to her.. this is the first night i've seen her happy in a long time.. so i'm glad for her..

    yeah.. i don't want to forget last night.. even though i was alone.. i got to see her eyes for a moment at least.. and i'm glad she can still be happy..

    Adam


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    dotsPassion's Mirrordots
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    The lights dim as I watch another
    My sister.. she sits afore me lost in her memory
    Never have I seen her look that way

    He takes her hand and moves closer to her
    Nothing but a promise in his eyes
    She believes it and that is enough for me..

    Before his lips find her own I stand up
    Perhaps I can't watch but really..
    I feel so alone..

    I walk into the warmed moon filled night..
    Memories washing over me in the pale light.. "I love you..."
    "Where are you?.. When can I take your hand again?..."




    Submitted on 2005-03-25 11:14:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Aww this is so sad yet hopeful. I like the idea of "Passion's Mirror" being your sister's eyes. Is that how you thought of it? That's what made me think of it anyway. I can't stand to watch other people kiss! Not because I'm jealous or mad or anything it's just a pet peeve for me. I don't blame you for leaving them be. I think that it's great that you know he feels love for her though. I enjoyed this great little piece and it provides you with great memories. :)
    -blt
    | Posted on 2005-03-27 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      how sweet. im so sorry that you have to be so far away from the one that you love. i only see my boyfriend once a week and i miss him like crazy. i couldnt imagine what its like for you. i go crazy after 3 or 4 days. but i will say that if it is meant to be then it will happen and you will be with her eventually. things that are meant to be have a way of working themselves out and just so you know...ella or drk_17_angl-is my best friend and i see her everyday. i make sure that she is ok and i will always be here for her whenever she needs so dont go worrying to much-i love her to.
    ~sweet
    | Posted on 2005-03-25 00:00:00 | by sweet-fire | [ Reply to This ]
      okay I am a little confused by what is going on. But is is written well. umm one question is afore supposed to be before. It sounds better before. Okay other then that is does have a lot of good emotions in it. But the idea is kinda confusing. It might just be me, but i got lost in it.
    | Posted on 2005-03-25 00:00:00 | by Kira Goddess | [ Reply to This ]


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