Description: This when I started was something completely different but turned into what it is now. The object of this guys affection walking inside his shoes. I like the concept of this so please be nice.Thanks.
OH wow...I love this poem. Just the whole concept of it was clever and really amazing. Taking a walk in anothers shoes, and then having looked at yourself in his shoes and what he thought about you. It was a nice twist that was seriously great.
I hold them in my hands testing my nerve if I could understand better I could serve
I really loved this stanza of the poem for some reason, just how it sounded when read aloud and how it felt was amazing. Very very nice job on this...do hope to see more like this one sometime. Take care...
Wow, I love the flow...its a great poem of regret and guilt for not doing something before it was too late I love it...I remember when my friend killed himself I went to his house to bring his mother something and when I walked into his room it's like I could feel the depression lingering in the air...I feel guilty for not being there for him...Great Poem
pretty darn good. i liked these two lines "if I could understand better/I could serve" and a lot of other stuff. i think it's cool how you say the poem tries to say how can make people feel alone - and from what i understood from your poem, loneliness kills. and i like the message of it - be nice. i liked the way you brought in his brother and dad and sorta gave him a little more depth. i just liked it. peace.
" BON, BON, BON" THAT WAS TOTALLY AMAZING. YOU REALLY PUT BOUNTIFUL EFFORT UPON THAT POEM. IT ERESSES SUSPENCE OF POINT OF VIEW AND VERY SELF CREATIVE TALENT. AS I READ THAT POEM IT MADE ME THINK OF PASS EERIENCE OF MY " PERSONAL" DAYS. I WISH PEOPLE IN THIS WORLD COULD UNDERSTAND THE CONCEPT OF THAT POEM BUT FACE IT , THEY NEVER WILL. DEATH SEEMS DO BE THE ANWER BUT ITS NOT. FOR ALL WE KNOW, I THINK !
i really like this poem. i tink it truly shows what can happen with just a simple hi. i think it shows how alot of people feel left out and just sayng hi can ake thier day. it is a brilliant peice and i look forward to reading more from you.
I really like it a lot. I just hope that this isn't really about someone that you know. I also hope that if it is that you're not really blaming yourself because it's not your fault if you are. Some people you just can't help. I know that for a fact. I want to help two of my brothers but I know that they won't want my help even if I tried. Keep up the great work.
its is very good that is true but the only thing that i seen wrong with it was that bad should have been bed but other than that there was nothing wrong with it so just change that one thing but nothing else ok nice rite
WOW i really liked it its one of the best poems i have ever read on this website i can really relate to this i've had friends who have saddly killed themselves and friends and my self who have slipped into depression and this described it really well good job