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Chaos Calligraphy

Author: EternitysLyre
ASL Info:    20/M/Taiwan.
Elite Ratio:    7.13 - 152 /170 /42
Words: 181
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Simple, clear, and didactic at best. If you don't know what I'm talking about, I'm probably talking about you.

Chaos Calligraphy

Oh, to freedom of speech, like the peachiest peach
Let nothing else my rambles breach
It's a gift of the heavens, how we write 'till eleven
And merrily strut forth and preach

Yes, a work of a lifetime, finished right before lunchtime
And a basket of wonderful rhymes
Let the praising asunder, shower on me like thunder
Cuz u all kno my werk ish seblime.

And isn't it pretty, how the silliest ditty
Neither wistful, nor wild, nor witty
Once upon the great window, takes the king's new gold spindle
No matter how worn-down or gritty

Wins a showbiz of wows, and while the man bows
Only the sulliest sow
'Midst an army of extol, finds the work itself rectal
And so secretly furrows a brow.

Yes, theres majik in taipos, and beaty in gryos
That gnash grammar right into pulp
If there's a word of dissent 'mongst the proud group repent
Swallow your pride in a gulp.

Submitted on 2005-03-25 13:16:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  what a way to cleverly insult someone! i love the casual incorporation of how some posters on here write- 'tis ingenious! i absolutely love Jemma Dumptruck's perfect way of describing this in the last line of her comment. it is. i know that you were playing on words, so corrections need not apply- and everyone else covered the rest- so it is in my court to say bravo- nice job and so on and so forth- i'd thoroughly enjoy seeing you completely verbally decimate someone once more- go pick another fight :) thanks for the awesome read. *md*
| Posted on 2005-04-23 00:00:00 | by MerryDeath | [ Reply to This ]
  Jonathan, what a delightful piece! Yes, there were words used incorrectly that I don't think were intentional (but how could we know?) and there were rhythm problems, but what the heck! This was so much fun!

Yes, a work of a lifetime, finished right before lunchtime

This may have been my favorite line - but then there are so many good lines!

Oh, I did enjoy this, I really did. mae
| Posted on 2005-04-04 00:00:00 | by mae | [ Reply to This ]
  Ohhh, this is good!
I'm glad that the chance I get to comment I get this.
Well... who exactly are you railing at, I wonder?
Is it those who laud others mindlessly?
Or those who are lauded?
Oooh, that's the rub!
I think you really wrote well here. The sing song, the construction, the cutting wit... very sarcastic, Jonathan!
| Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by Learah | [ Reply to This ]
  I'm sucking my teeth, frowning, and chuckling. wondering If I should niggle over grammar with you, or pat you an the back and say "good job! good job! oh, wow...such a funny bloke!" I could do both, you know...god, and here I go.
Um, maybe you know this but the word "asunder" means to be separated into two parts. it can be used as an adverb, or adjective, but not a can't DO asunder, but you can BE (torn,etc.) yeah, so that's not hugely imporatant but I thought you might want to know...also "extol" is a verb, not a noun, so you can't really have a shower of would be like saying "midst a shower of slap." on top of this, "extol" and "rectal" are rediculous rhymes...if these things were intentional, then kudos to you, my friend, for bringing out the crabby pedagogue in me...if not, maybe look into altering a few words...cuz this really is funny, just needs a bit of polish...the best satire is stuff that people can't turn right around and make fun of...anyway - i'm rambling...these are only my suggestions and as always - feel free to take em or leave em...over all this is a well thrown lyrical dagger.
| Posted on 2005-03-25 00:00:00 | by Jemma Dumptruck | [ Reply to This ]

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