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    dots Submission Name: whats the pointdots

    Author: morbid_misery
    ASL Info:    17/f/ontcanada
    Elite Ratio:    2.8 - 40/61/33
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Lyrics/The pain inside
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    v1)whats the point of
    sunrise and sunset
    when were running out of time
    slipped into the unknown
    tears escaped my eyes again
    loved and lost to you
    I'm trying to understand you

    ©another day passed me by
    I find myself still alive
    whats the point of being here
    forgotten in time

    v2)whats the point of
    moving on again
    when pains around the bend
    every turn that you take
    cry myself to sleep again
    don't know what to do
    I'm trying to forget you

    Submitted on 2005-03-25 17:16:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really liked this...You kept the flow going but it didn't ALL ryhme. Very cool...don't change a thing.....I especially like

    I find myself still alive
    whats the point of being here
    forgotten in time

    Blessed Be!
    | Posted on 2005-03-25 00:00:00 | by Sarah Leger | [ Reply to This ]

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