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    dots Submission Name: My Living Angeldots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 191
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       Please comment and tell me how you felt about it. rough draft, needs alot of work.


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    dotsMy Living Angeldots
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    The girl next to me has to be my living angel.
    She the one who took me away from the drugs that once held my life.
    She the one who took the knife away from me when I wanted to take my own life.

    The girl next to me has to be my living angel.
    When she gets near me my heart skips a beat.
    When she leaves my heart gets cold.

    The girl next to me has to be my living angel.
    The sight of her makes me wonder why I tried to take my life.
    Her eyes take my pain away.
    Her touch calms my heart when I feel Hatred to the world I hate so much.

    The girl next to me has to be my living angel.
    This girl saved me too many times to be a regular girl.
    She makes my mind go into a twirl
    I think she the whole world.

    The girl next to me has to be my living angel.
    She my angel
    She the key to my whole life.
    She my angel
    The only angel that I will love.




    Submitted on 2005-03-25 21:10:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i really liked this one alot. its really sweet i wish everyone had those little angels in our lives. she must be a very special person to you. great work keep it up
    | Posted on 2005-05-01 00:00:00 | by sweet_rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it.. but what i dont like it is the use "living angel" too much..
    the rest is really nice
    this i like:
    The girl next to me has to be my living angel.
    When she gets near me my heart skips a beat.
    When she leaves my heart gets cold.
    good luck on ur nxt poem:)
    | Posted on 2005-03-26 00:00:00 | by sophisticatedme | [ Reply to This ]
      wonderful write I'd clear the first stanza
    but the rest of it very eloquent and your metaphorical message clear well done
    | Posted on 2005-03-25 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]


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